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Redemption

Paul's Unofficial Remix Challenge

By Hannah MoorePublished 27 days ago Updated 27 days ago 1 min read
Top Story - March 2024
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Redemption
Photo by Taylor Deas-Melesh on Unsplash

The world you loved is gone,

You experienced something others

So rarely do,

The chance to start anew.

That glimpsed never should, that could, that was,

Dismayed, fading façade,

Reflected in the shining blade,

Turned in towards the thundering heart,

The fire burnt fingers begging,

Tantalising. Hard love.

Tough love.

Pain.

No smooth lipped kisses,

To soothe where sharp, rough edges

Pierce and cut and maim.

When did you last reach out and grab for the clouds, sun, moon and stars?

Weary, yearning watcher,

These were yesterday’s losses.

High days that ripped

An untempered schism

Of war and love, life and death.

Sweep away the storm cast story,

Place the heart upon the alter

Of the word. Breathe life into

The fragile mind, rein encroaching thoughts.

Cradle self-worth.

Immerse yourself in water,

Tilt back you head and float.

Coalesce.

You are the sea.

You are the breeze.

You are the mist, the smooth touch, the laughter and the tears.

Pivot to emotional warmth.

To love, to kindness, to joy.

To the reality of life, when you remember.

Acclimatise yourself to peace.

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Written for Paul's Remix Challenge, and drawing from all five of his remix poems (below), but also on our many conversations, which I have valued greatly.

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  • Heather Hubler8 days ago

    Ooooo, I absolutely loved the placement of that pivot line and how I felt the turn happen!! Bravo. This was wonderful :)

  • Mackenzie Davis14 days ago

    This one, Hannah! Submit this one!! (Haha, I know it’s Paul’s source material, but wow. It is journal-worthy.) I could see Paul all the way thru, and you clear as day. The balance of your voices is sublime. Ah! I wanna eat this up! You’re marvelous, my friend. ❤️

  • Grz Colm19 days ago

    Wonderful entry Hannah!! 😊👍

  • Shirley Belk20 days ago

    Just now getting caught up on my reading. Beautifully done, Hannah!

  • Ameer Bibi21 days ago

    Congratulations for top story clearly describes that love is not a bed of roses

  • Babs Iverson21 days ago

    Congratulations on the Leaderboard win!!!🥰🥰🥰

  • Your poem weaves a powerful journey from darkness to light, beautifully illustrating the resilience of the human spirit and the transformative power of redemption.

  • Congrats on top story! I am in awe, so beautiful! 💗

  • Excellent Top Story Hannah. Congratulations 🙌

  • Congrats on the top story. It's like you put Paul on and made him fit!!

  • Caroline Jane24 days ago

    Fabulous message that trickles through every single line. ❤️

  • Anna 24 days ago

    Congrats on Top Story!🥳🥳🥳

  • Anna 24 days ago

    Good take on the challenge!

  • Kodah24 days ago

    Congrats on top story!! 💌💌

  • Well-wrought! Could you suggest one short piece that is a good introduction to your body of work here? I've read some engaging works from you here, but I haven't found the one I want for my CREATION MYTH yet! Link me, please!

  • ROCK 24 days ago

    What a beautiful take on Paul's challenge; congratulations on Top Story!

  • Ruby Red24 days ago

    Wow 🤩 And congratulations!

  • JBaz24 days ago

    Congratulations Should have guessed this would be top Story

  • Brin J.24 days ago

    Congrats on Top Story!🥳

  • Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • “M”24 days ago

    Greg job ♡

  • D.K. Shepard24 days ago

    Great piece! The inspiration for it was clear but it was also still very original!

  • JBaz24 days ago

    Very smooth and wonderful to read It took me to a different place that I wished to be Congratulations

  • angela hepworth25 days ago

    this was gorgeous, the imagery was staggering

  • This was so good. A remix challenge is so original!

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