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Snafu Senryu

By Babs IversonPublished about a month ago 1 min read
Photo by Denin Lawley on Unsplash

Trip to the car wash

his toddler in the child's seat

car locked, keys inside.

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Writer's notes: Written for the Snafu Senryu Challenge.

"The Prompt

Capture the essence of an awkward moment in a senryu poem."

Today, while waiting to meet a Facebook Marketplace buyer, observed people trying to gain entry into their locked car. Watched a good samaritan provide assistance. The car was opened. Smiling, their faces relaxed that their problem was solved.

As this situation played out, it reminded me of a snafu over twenty-three years ago. My son went to the car wash and had his son, my grandson, in the back strapped into his child's seat.

Who hasn't locked themselves out of a car? Admittedly, it happens!

Now, we go thru the drive-through car wash. Back then, the car wash had a hand-held wand selecting suds, water, or wax. Inserting the coinage for the length of time, quarters were entered into the control panel.

Thankfully, our local Fire Department came to my grandson's rescue unlocking the car door.

Thank you for reading! You are appreciated!

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About the Creator

Babs Iverson

Barbara J Iversen, also known as Babs Iverson, lives in Texas and loves her grandkids to the moon and back. After writing one story, she found that writing has many benefits especially during a pandemic and a Texas-size Arctic Blast.

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  • Real Poetic23 days ago

    Oh no. My stomach just dropped for that parent!

  • Sid Aaron Hirji29 days ago

    whew glad kid was ok

  • Heart in my throat, head spinning.

  • Denise E Lindquistabout a month ago

    Nice Senryu! So glad to hear it wasn't one of those tragic stories. I much prefer the happy ending!!❤️

  • J. S. Wadeabout a month ago

    Oops 😅🤣

  • Tiffany Gordon about a month ago

    well written! glad your grandbaby was rescued!

  • Grz Colmabout a month ago

    That was lucky. Great Senryu Babs! 👍

  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarranabout a month ago

    I'm so glad your grandson was saved! Loved your Senryu!

  • Melissa Ingoldsbyabout a month ago

    Yes I am grateful for the happy end!! Great work Babs💕

  • Cathy holmesabout a month ago

    Oh no. Good thing For the happy ending..

  • Moe Radosevichabout a month ago

    Yes, panic city indeed, good one Babs 😊😊

  • Mother Combsabout a month ago

    For that reason, always carry a spare in your pocket.

  • Dana Crandellabout a month ago

    Ooo, this one is scary. Happened to a woman in a WM parking lot one day long ago. I went in and bought a package of 6 wire coat hangers because they didn't have them individually. Rescue took 2 minutes. That's not so easy with newer vehicles. I have, of course, locked myself out several times.

  • Manisha Dhalaniabout a month ago

    What a nightmare!

  • Mariann Carrollabout a month ago

    That was scary 😦

  • Naveedabout a month ago

    I like the contrast between the innocence of the toddler and the stress of the father.

  • Andrew C McDonaldabout a month ago

    It definitely does happen and can be quite tragic on a hot day. Great job.

  • Kendall Defoe about a month ago

    It happens more often than we want to admit...

  • 👀😮🤣

  • Thavien Yliasterabout a month ago

    Oh, my parents have experienced this before. I remember one day that my dad left me locked in the car with his keys by mistake and tried to use a coat hanger to open the car door. Somehow, that day, I found the strength within my little fingers to open my own buckle from my car seat, unlocking the door after I got out. It was a rude awakening from one heckuva good nap

  • Shirley Belkabout a month ago

    panic mode for sure!

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