One Time My Shoelace Came Untied
And I cried for weeks
Until my mama found me in the park and tied them for me
But it was too late, I was dead already
Cold and blue
With puss coming out of my eyesockets
And the fillings leaking out of my teeth
I don't know how that started to happen
But it did
Maybe it was too hot and the sun melted them
Or something whatever
But my mama did tie my shoes
So now I can be buried and have my face look nice
Maybe I'll be put in with the rest of the X-Files
I swear I just saw Scully poking around in my innards
I wish she'd leave my intestines alone though
'Cuz that just looks funny and makes me laugh
It reminds me of how I used to eat hot dogs in the park
They were yummy
Not as bloody, though, as the intestines that is
But they did taste fairly good
With ketchup, mustard, and onions squeezing out the bottom
Like when you have some kind of strange bowel movement
When it drops on the ground it all looks like diarrhea
And then some dog comes to lick it up
He must like it a lot, because he always begs for more
I like Scully
I wish she'd tied my shoes for me.
About the Creator
Hillery D. Keefer
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My name is Hillery, with an 'e.' Nice to meet you. I'm new here but I've been writing poetry and flash fiction since I was a child. I like to write in the way that I think, so I guess it's kind of stream-of-consciousness at times.
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Comments (25)
Super good, and super sad😭😭😭 A good dark that hits you in the tummy 👍🏼
Congrats on your top story!! I commented earlier but I’m glad others are enjoying your piece! 😁
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Beautiful
An interesting poem.
That imagery went to so many place so quickly. A harmony of grotesque, weird, heartache and hope. Splendid stuff.
Whoaaa, that got so dark! I loved it! Subscribed to you!
This is other-worldly good, no fantastic! I had no idea where you were going but you tied it (see what I did there?) all together nicely. Congratulations on Top Story!
I can never eat a hotdog again without your description popping up in my head. I guess I should thank you. Congratulations on Top Story
Captured my attention. I’m not one for blood and pus with my morning coffee, though. At least not until today, lol
Nice story <3
Congratulations on your Top Story🎉💖✨😉
Good job
Well done, nice story
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good work
I loved this, but...I hope my mother never ties my shoe laces because she'd tie them together!
I like Scully, too... and I like this, and I could never have guessed where you were heading with this one. An excellent TS choice!
I am still digesting this one but the imagery is very vivid. Nicely done in creating the mental image! And the sad tones...
Wow. Let me just get this out of the way: That went south in a hurry. Ok, that said, this was heart rending and damn, what imagery! Not to mention the voice you've written it in. It also doesn't hurt that I'm an old X-Files fan. Congratulations on the Top Story!
Ohh this is so terribly sad 😔 so well done ♥️
Congratulations on your Top Story 😁 Very vivid imagery here. Gross but excellent 👍 I love Scully, personally. I have decided, if I get another dog, s/he will be called Scully 😁
Well Done!!!💖💖💕
Nice story❤️😉📝
Hey - That was um.. interesting😄. Still trying to think what I make of it, but it definitely captured my attention. Such a unique voice! 😊✨