by Pierre Voisin (Instagram: @daily_minimal)
Every now and then I fall apart. Oh moon,
comfort me how you comfort the mourners.
Let me bury my burning face
in the darkness of your shoulder. Oh moon,
please don't let them
see their constant go to pieces. Don't let them see how
every now and then I fall apart. Oh, moon.
About the Creator
Ava Mack
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- Runner-Up in Abecedarian Challenge
Comments (6)
Love how you’ve gone for the eclipse concept, and personified the sun Ava! “ Let me bury my burning face in the darkness of your shoulder.” is a great piece of imagery🤗
Really, really wonderfully composed piece, and so meaningful!
Beautiful entry. Well done.
Oh, Ava. See what I did there? This was stunning. I like that you went "there" with the opening line. Well done on a great entry.
Beautiful take on the eclipse!✅
On point for today!!!! Love it! So sweet and universal!!🙌🙌