Lovely
One Last Waltz
Held. I wiped tears from your eyes; we played your favourite song sung by Etta James. "At Last", your frail frame unfolded into my strong heart beat, not missing a step we made it almost to the end, before collapsing. Anguish pushed through a slight glimmer in your grey eyes, once again fever swept over you; I wiped your brow with a cool cloth, then like white chocolate in the afternoon sun, you melted away. Our love was a last dance, a promenade of bashful memories, tender as the fledgling free from it's warmth, flightless, featherless, starving, then fed. I longed for one dance more, yet time stole us in a heated breath; at last, you will be, forever lovely.
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I First Saw Him
When I first saw him sitting on the wall, relaxed and looking out over the water, I was sure he wasn't a local. Not including children, there are only about 250 or 300 of us in this area full-time, though that number is ten-fold in the summer, and I know everyone at least by sight or by family resemblance. And yet, the way he sat looked familiar and started my mind sorting and discarding among the families I knew, not quite like this one, not quite like that one.
By Natalie Wilkinson7 days ago in Fiction
Comments (50)
So incredibly heartbreaking and amazingly expressed. I got tears in my eyes 🥹
Beautiful.
This is so beautifully sad, parting is such sweet sorrow. But does the spirit still linger, forever keeping us company. We hope.
Amazing story keep uploading
Beautiful
Beautiful and tragic. Bravo!
heartbreaking and gorgeous all at once!! Brilliant work! BRAVO!👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾
I am happy that you stopped by my page to read because that led me to your page, and I got to read these beautiful words. "Your frail frame unfolded into my strong heartbeat." ~~ What gorgeous imagery. I felt this one in my soul.
Wow! Such sadness and comfort as it would be an okay way to die on the dance floor with a loved one.❤️Congratulations on top story! 🎉🎉🎉
Poignant! We want enduring moments, no matter the circumstance.
Lovely describes the entire piece. Beauty is in the experience of the knower, as I like to say, and here you demonstrate an ability to reveal your inner experience of it so well in its warmest, tenderest, most fragile way. Rumi or Kahlil Gibran could not have done better, and nod approval from the immortal realms! Subscription reciprocated! I will add this one to my CREATION MYTH! https://vocal.media/poets/creation-myth-m8dm0x8d
This article captures the essence of love and loss in a devastating way, and it is extremely heartbreaking yet wonderfully written.
Omgosh this is heartbreaking but also do beautiful
Your poem is beautiful
You've managed to uplift my spirits while breaking my heart. Brilliant work!
Beautifully written and straight to the heart. What talent!
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This is beautiful.
This really is lovely!🥰
Good work poem
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The dance of life...my heart is still recovering. Congrats on this wonderful top story
Congrats on Top Story! Great work!
Congrats on Top Story.
The song, the dance, the words, the emotion were brilliant and lovely!!! Love it!!!♥️♥️💕 Congratulations on Top Story too!!!