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Lovely

One Last Waltz

By ROCK Published 19 days ago β€’ Updated 19 days ago β€’ 1 min read
Top Story - February 2024
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Lovely
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Held. I wiped tears from your eyes; we played your favourite song sung by Etta James. "At Last", your frail frame unfolded into my strong heart beat, not missing a step we made it almost to the end, before collapsing. Anguish pushed through a slight glimmer in your grey eyes, once again fever swept over you; I wiped your brow with a cool cloth, then like white chocolate in the afternoon sun, you melted away. Our love was a last dance, a promenade of bashful memories, tender as the fledgling free from it's warmth, flightless, featherless, starving, then fed. I longed for one dance more, yet time stole us in a heated breath; at last, you will be, forever lovely.

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About the Creator

ROCK

Writing truth or fiction, feels as if I am stroking across a canvas, painting colourful words straight from my heart. I write from my old farmhouse in Sweden. *Favourite Munchies while writing* leftovers, hot coffee, herbal tea, good wine!

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    Creative use of language & vocab

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    The story invoked strong personal emotions

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  • Elaine Sihera4 days ago

    Beautifully written and straight to the heart. What talent!

  • olymoolla6 days ago

    You have written so many beautiful stories your story is admirable please visit my vocal id and read a story please

  • Hannah Moore11 days ago

    This is beautiful.

  • Anna 13 days ago

    This really is lovely!πŸ₯°

  • Good work poem

  • Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! πŸŽ‰πŸ’–πŸŽŠπŸŽ‰πŸ’–πŸŽŠ

  • The dance of life...my heart is still recovering. Congrats on this wonderful top story

  • Kendrick Porter15 days ago

    Congrats on Top Story! Great work!

  • Bishnu Mahto 15 days ago

    Congrats on Top Story.

  • Babs Iverson15 days ago

    The song, the dance, the words, the emotion were brilliant and lovely!!! Love it!!!β™₯️β™₯οΈπŸ’• Congratulations on Top Story too!!!

  • Parents are consecrating for us all the day. If we are able to see that, the parents and we, both are lucky.

  • Kendrick Porter15 days ago

    Great writing!

  • Gerard DiLeo15 days ago

    Congrats on Top "forever lovely" Story.

  • Caroline Jane16 days ago

    Is this THE story? It is beautiful. Congratulations. πŸ₯°

  • JBaz16 days ago

    Beautiful, sad and lovely all at the same time

  • Hope Martin16 days ago

    This broke my heart, but filled me with love at the same time. Congrats on top story, it so so deserves it.

  • L.C. SchΓ€fer16 days ago

    Back to say well done, T.S. well deserved πŸ‘

  • Rachel Deeming16 days ago

    There's some lovely imagery through this. "white chocolate in the afternoon sun" and "time stole us in a heated breath." Great lines.

  • Sayed Mubashar 16 days ago

    So nice

  • Alyssa Nicole16 days ago

    So lovely and heartbreaking. I love how you capture this precious moment in just a few emotional words. Congrats on Top Story!

  • Heather Hubler16 days ago

    Congrats on Top Story :)

  • Cathy holmes16 days ago

    That is so beautiful, and yet so sad. Congrats on the TS.

  • Ashley Shiflett16 days ago

    This was very beautiful!!

  • First, I LOVE that song! Etta James poured her heart and soul into it. Your description here is magical. "Our love was a last dance, a promenade of bashful memories, tender as the fledgling free from its warmth, flightless, featherless, starving, then fed." BEAUTIFUL! What powerful imagery!

  • Oh I loved the part of the white chocolate melting in the sun. Your poem was sk poignantly beautiful!

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