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Lethal Home Etiquette

A poem of self destruct

By Natasha CollazoPublished 3 months ago β€’ Updated 3 months ago β€’ 1 min read
Top Story - January 2024
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Lethal Home Etiquette
Photo by Elijah Hiett on Unsplash

You left the door open

after three days, a slight chill

a cool breeze that bit my skin.

*

After a month,

snow flurries covered the entrance,

harsh winters soon followed,

shoveling up the remnants of your exit.

*

After three months,

it started to thaw,

frozen panels dripping wet,

residual damage of the door becoming a threat.

*

After six months,

watercolor poppies and hummingbirds

hummed,

i watched from the inside, as I was greeted

by ribbons of the sun.

*

I waited, and waited, and waited,

winter, summer, spring,

now fall,

i realized no one was coming back at all,

to close the door.

*

Thought to myself,

how ridiculous it is to have my front door open

all the time.

*

Permitting intrusion without ammunition

while roughing it out,

in brusque, harsh conditions.

*

I glanced outside,

a cool breeze bit my skin,

snow flurries started to cover the entrance.

*

The risk was far too great to endure another

year,

of chilly throbs, and starless drear.

*

With every passing day, piles on another chore,

no one was coming home; that’s when i decided it was time,

for me to close the door.

sad poetryStream of ConsciousnessMental Healthheartbreak
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About the Creator

Natasha Collazo

Werewolf Writer

I get inspired at the mid of night

Stock market by day, howler by night.

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Instagram: @sunnycollazo

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  • Anna 2 months ago

    Congrats on Top Story!πŸ₯³

  • Denise E Lindquist2 months ago

    Wow, powerful! Congratulations on the well-deserved top story!πŸŽ‰πŸŽ‰πŸŽ‰

  • I somehow missed reading this… excellent! Congratulations on Top Story and Leaderboard placingβœ…πŸ€©

  • Tiffany Gordon 3 months ago

    That was phenomenal! Congrats on making the Leaderboard!😊

  • Toby Heward3 months ago

    A Masterpiece indeed

  • Celia in Underland3 months ago

    Absolutely stunning. I really loved the image of the ribbons of sun, beautiful metaphor 🀍

  • Shazee Tahir3 months ago

    amazing great concept please check my profile also

  • Lamar Wiggins3 months ago

    Very sad and effective use of words. Also, I LOVED the title. Congrats!

  • Great concept for the tale , and wonderful words

  • Kodah3 months ago

    ❣️ Congrats on top story!! ❣️

  • Fly Alone3 months ago

    Superb. ❣️

  • How long does one wait for another who has left to return? How soon is a moment too soon to close the door & move on? What should we be willing to suffer for one who has abused us so? I have a tendency to leave those doors open way too long, also, Natasha. May yours be well shut upon what was & open anew to what will be.

  • Andrea Corwin 3 months ago

    I loved this! New beginnings. Congrats on Top Story!!

  • Kendall Defoe 3 months ago

    I really liked this. Taking responsibility; accepting change; doing what you do not want to do... Sounds like life... :)

  • Whoaaaa, this blew my mind! I've learned the hard way that doors are meant to be closed and stay closed. Open doors are just not worth the mental torture that comes with it. You know the saying, when one door closes, another opens? I've always hated that saying. Because another door never ever seemed to open. But now I realised that for my mental peace, I want all doors closed. Your poem was so powerful and eye opening! I loved it so much! Congratulations on your Top Story! πŸŽ‰πŸ’–πŸŽŠπŸŽ‰πŸ’–πŸŽŠ

  • Cathy holmes3 months ago

    This is beautiful. congrats on the top story.

  • JBaz3 months ago

    What a beautiful ending, tied everything together Congratualations

  • Catherine Dorian3 months ago

    This felt like a reminder that we have agency; we get to choose who we let in and out, and how we clean up after those who have left. Congratulations, Natasha, on the well-deserved Top Story!

  • Lacy Loar-Gruenler3 months ago

    Natasha, this is breathtaking and so empowering! The cycle of life heals so many wounds and you described it beautifully! Bravo for TS, too!

  • Margaret Brennan3 months ago

    congratulations on TS. this is definitely a winner!

  • Hannah Moore3 months ago

    Brilliant. I hoped you would step out come summer, but this proved harder and sadder and hopefully, in the end, stronger.

  • David E. Perry3 months ago

    I enjoyed reading this. Good work.

  • That was amazing! I love the imagery and the relatable feelings of waiting for someone to return, dealing with harsh conditions, dealing with less than ideal conditions, until finally having the resolve to put an end to the waiting. That was so good.

  • Rachel Deeming3 months ago

    Should it end? Should it survive? The imagery in this is great. Sad but ultimately optimistic.

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