is not the end, this
A poem with different meanings
The world is losing me
Day by day, little by little
It would be foolish to believe, that
This is where I'm supposed to be
In my beautiful heart, I know
I will watch, everything fall apart
I would never promise, that
Love will be enough
When all I know is
How much even the air hurts
You won't ever hear me, say
I am a phoenix rising
From the middle of ashes
I can only have faith, in the truth
If I was gone, If I disappeared
No one would notice
You can't honestly, say
There is a way to save me
When I already know
This will end, badly
Even if you told me, a thousand times
You would never, convince me
I matter
Because, I already know
Different
I won't lie, I won't tell you
This will all be okay
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This is a great entry for the inverse, and is a powerful read both ways! “When all I know is How much even the air hurts” is a key line in the middle, and I like how you manipulate the placement of words so the meaning switches easily. Feels like the speaker is talking themselves through their own self doubt and fear. Well done👏
Ouch!!!! This one knocked me for six. One minute doom and gloom, then you do rise from the ashes the next moment. I know that I feel the down one some days...and the up one another day. I love the phoenix. So I love this poem.
This is profound, uplifting, and masterfully crafted. Amazing, Invisi!! 💗
Ok I don’t think I’ve ever used this word before… but… superb! That’s honestly what I thought when I read this and then read it backwards. It kind of reminded me of going through a breakup and having those woe is me moments and being so sad, but then the reverse is when you’ve learned better from that experience and have gained strength! This was so awesome! Well done!
Fantastic and impressive!!!💕♥️♥️
Whoaaaaa!! This was phenomenal! It works so well both ways!! Top to bottom is so sad but bottom to top is so freaking powerful! You nailed this challenge! Keeping my fingers crossed for this to win!
Magnificently well done. The best example of this I've seen for the challenge yet, Invisi.
🤯❤️ this is perfection in both directions.
Well done!
Excellent work👏🏽👍🏽
Beautifully crafted, my friend ❤️ This is a winner in my book
You nailed this! It is, far and away, the best one I've read. Excellent!
Beautiful both ways, but the reverse is the best!
Will this is breath taking and so moving, I love the way it reads both directions and is just so powerful!! Great work my friend!!
Awesome! You did It! It works so well. I haven’t even yet thought about what to do with this challenge. This is a solid example. Thanks for sharing!