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Hostages of the Hourglass

Time brought them together but what destiny unites, life divides

By Dharrsheena Raja SegarranPublished 2 years ago Updated 3 months ago 1 min read
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An old hourglass held them both hostage

She gazed at him from the upper bulb

The elusive sand flowed into the lower bulb

Where he was running out of space

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He begged desperately for her to help

She just couldn't stop crying

Because everything she tried had failed

But there was one way, though

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Old hourglasses had one major flaw

Their upper and lower bulbs weren't one piece

They were connected by a cord at their union

Coated with wax to hold them together

~~~~~

She knew she had to melt the wax

She set herself on fire for that

The melted wax disconnected the bulbs

He broke free and ran to his lover

~~~~~

While her ashes mixed with the sand

He and his lover led a beautiful life together

He never thought about her once

Although she sacrificed her life to save his
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Dharrsheena Raja Segarran

My mental health decline brought about a lot of darkness and I embraced it. It now flows out mostly as Dark Stories and Poetry.

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  • JBaz2 months ago

    'While her ashes mixed with the sand He and his lover led a beautiful life together He never thought about her once' This was heart wrenching, I don't get emotional over romance but this one was sad. That line got to me.

  • Isabella Rose3 months ago

    "She knew she had to melt the wax She set herself on fire for that The melted wax disconnected the bulbs He broke free and ran to his lover" This speaks so much of sacrifice for an emotionally unhealthy or unavailable relationship. After he got what he wanted from her, he just disappeared. Many people, of both sexes, are like this, but I can assure you that not all people are this way. Keep faith in true love, My Morbid Friend.

  • Oh wow, that was good. He did not deserve her sacrifice

  • Denise E Lindquist6 months ago

    Wow! Well done! A poem I missed 💖💜

  • Darkos8 months ago

    What Women can do for Love and they almost never get it or feel from the man it's true real and heartbreaking to experience Beautiful creative way capturing it ❤️🧡🧡🧡🧡❤️❤️

  • Rob Angeli10 months ago

    Really charming, but unspeakably sad poem. Much applause!

  • Donna Fox (HKB)10 months ago

    Dharrsheena, this was a really emotional piece for me! I could feel the pain of the upper bulb, she gave up everything for him and he didn't even notice. Such a sad ending, but what a beautiful metaphor for what often happens in a relationship and what leads to couples breaking up. I fell in love with this analogy you've created, the idea that one gives everything for the other and the latter never knows... It's so beautiful and tragic!

  • Rob Angeli11 months ago

    Executed with style and aplomb!

  • L.C. Schäferabout a year ago

    Lesson learned. Never burn yourself for an ungrateful toad of a man! Beautiful work 😁

  • Miles Pen2 years ago

    Another fantastic poem! I would love to hear your feedback on my story!

  • VJHD2 years ago

    Very clever take on an hour glass. Very sad 😔 but beautifully done.

  • Talia Devora2 years ago

    Nice poem! Thanks for sharing

  • Beth Sarah2 years ago

    What a beautiful extended metaphor - I loved it!

  • Grz Colm2 years ago

    Nice imagery.

  • Bonnie JS Eglin2 years ago

    Didn't realize THIS was YOURS When I shared it on my FB profile a few days ago WOW! Kinda cool! Feeling it!

  • S.B. Goncarova2 years ago

    Gorgeous. So well done!

  • Tragic and sad.

  • I like!

  • Cathy holmes2 years ago

    Sad and so well written

  • Mariann Carroll2 years ago

    Very sad 😢 Bravo 👏

  • J. Delaney-Howe2 years ago

    Nicely written!

  • A lovely poem! I especially like the concept of wax. I could imagine a painting in my mind.

  • Luna Jupiter2 years ago

    This is such a beautiful poem and a wonderful metaphor. Can't wait to read more from you!

  • Mala2 years ago

    What a touching poem. Reading that her ashes mixed into the sand gave me chills. Thank you!

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