When Things Get Too Heavy
We reach our breaking point
It was all too heavy
The weight of it all
Was just
Too
Heavy
She wanted to let go
But it was pulling her down
Dragging her
Through its darkest depths
She tried to break free
It was pointless
Like quicksand
It started to swallow her
She struggled to get out
It made her sink even deeper
She needed to let go
But how?
She already tried struggling
Then she remembered
Quicksand loosens up
When we stop struggling
She learned to relax
It let her go
She felt lighter
She was floating
In the vast ocean
She went with the flow
Of the current and the waves
It was so much easier
So much lighter
She felt the bliss
She wanted to float forever
For it was a beautiful feeling
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Dharrsheena Raja Segarran
My mental health decline brought along a lot of Darkness and I embraced it. This Darkness flows out in the form of Horror Stories and Dark Poetry 🖤
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Comments (61)
This is beautiful, Dharrsheena! I imagined it was addressing worry. Life's worries can drag us down, and the more we worry about a problem, the heavier the burden. As the saying goes, “Worrying does not take away tomorrow's troubles. It takes away today's peace.” This was a beautiful poem, with layered meanings!
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Very nice.
A lovely metaphor for dealing with life's challenges.💙Anneliese
grt writing.........
BRILLIANT!
Very nice dear:)
nice :)
This is amazing work! You’re a great writer!
Unforgiveness surely feels like this. The quicksand. The struggle. Then you release and accept where you are and how you feel. It is forgiveness at its best. Love this poem. May I read it for my YouTube Channel and link back here?
Fabulous!!! Absolutely fabulous!!!💖💖💕
Excellent
Another great piece of work, really enjoyed it.
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beautiful. 💜
Nice story...keep rocking
This is a great piece and a great metaphor for letting things go! Very awesome! I love it!
Hearted and subscribed love the lesson in this poem sometimes to get better we just have to let go
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This was so good, I really feel like I connect with this message, feels very familiar to some aspects of life. Thank you!
Deep poem. Big heart
Great Poem. Really liked it!
So deep and compelling. The mid-section that focuses on remebering to "let go" resonates immensely with me. We often don't even realized how clenched we are going through life until we actually relax and start letting go and feeling the floating sensation mentioned in your poem.
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