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When Things Get Too Heavy

We reach our breaking point

By Dharrsheena Raja SegarranPublished 2 years ago Updated 3 months ago 1 min read
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It was all too heavy

The weight of it all

Was just

Too

Heavy

She wanted to let go

But it was pulling her down

Dragging her

Through its darkest depths

She tried to break free

It was pointless

Like quicksand

It started to swallow her

She struggled to get out

It made her sink even deeper

She needed to let go

But how?

She already tried struggling

Then she remembered

Quicksand loosens up

When we stop struggling

She learned to relax

It let her go

She felt lighter

She was floating

In the vast ocean

She went with the flow

Of the current and the waves

It was so much easier

So much lighter

She felt the bliss

She wanted to float forever

For it was a beautiful feeling
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Dharrsheena Raja Segarran

My mental health decline brought about a lot of darkness and I embraced it. It now flows out mostly as Dark Stories and Poetry.

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  • The Dani Writer2 months ago

    This is DEEP. Might be just me but I felt myself submerging. Powerful writing!

  • Eiman Asif3 months ago

    incredible poem...indeed letting go is a great relief but its hard to let go too.... nice poem..

  • Isabella Rose4 months ago

    Letting go, even for a little while, is worth it. If it's something that you need to pick up again, you can when you have an emotional rest.

  • JBaz7 months ago

    oh wow Dharrsheena, this was so beautiful and honest. You speak for anyone who has struggled and finally accepted it. If you see your number of reads going up on this it is me re reading it over and over.

  • Donna Fox (HKB)9 months ago

    This one also holds up so well to what I remember it to be!! It's uplifting, breath taking and such a great refresher about the perils of dwelling on the struggles of life and what happens when you fight too hard or forget what's actually worth fighting for! Great work Dharrsheena! 🩵

  • Rob Angeli9 months ago

    Wonderful work as always, this is a powerful piece of poetry.

  • Catherine Nyomenda9 months ago

    Girl, you hit a nerve in me. I love this.

  • This is a valuable message. A way to strive...or not strive, but rest.

  • Donna Fox (HKB)11 months ago

    Dharrsheena, this was such a relatable piece for me! I loved the wording and flow of it, it was emotionally evoking and yet uplifting! Great work my friend! 💜

  • This is beautiful, Dharrsheena! I imagined it was addressing worry. Life's worries can drag us down, and the more we worry about a problem, the heavier the burden. As the saying goes, “Worrying does not take away tomorrow's troubles. It takes away today's peace.” This was a beautiful poem, with layered meanings!

  • Mohammed Abdul Rahmanabout a year ago

    Hello, How are you? Hope you are doing well. Can I know where you from..??

  • John M Edwards Jrabout a year ago

    Very nice.

  • Testabout a year ago

    A lovely metaphor for dealing with life's challenges.💙Anneliese

  • Albert John'sabout a year ago

    grt writing.........

  • Brenton Fabout a year ago

    BRILLIANT!

  • Jazmin Fernandezabout a year ago

    Very nice dear:)

  • Testabout a year ago

    nice :)

  • Queen of Forgiveness™about a year ago

    Unforgiveness surely feels like this. The quicksand. The struggle. Then you release and accept where you are and how you feel. It is forgiveness at its best. Love this poem. May I read it for my YouTube Channel and link back here?

  • Babs Iversonabout a year ago

    Fabulous!!! Absolutely fabulous!!!💖💖💕

  • Vadim Kaganabout a year ago

    Excellent

  • Adam Stanbridgeabout a year ago

    Another great piece of work, really enjoyed it.

  • Anfas Mohammedabout a year ago

    hi

  • Anfas Mohammedabout a year ago

    beautiful. 💜

  • SHRI Gabout a year ago

    Nice story...keep rocking

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