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When Things Get Too Heavy

We reach our breaking point

By Dharrsheena Raja SegarranPublished 11 months ago 1 min read
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It was all too heavy

The weight of it all

Was just



She wanted to let go

But it was pulling her down

Dragging her

Through its darkest depths

She tried to break free

It was pointless

Like quicksand

It started to swallow her

She struggled to get out

It made her sink even deeper

She needed to let go

But how?

She already tried struggling

Then she remembered

Quicksand loosens up

When we stop struggling

She learned to relax

It let her go

She felt lighter

She was floating

In the vast ocean

She went with the flow

Of the current and the waves

It was so much easier

So much lighter

She felt the bliss

She wanted to float forever

For it was a beautiful feeling

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Dharrsheena Raja Segarran

My mental health decline brought along a lot of Darkness and I embraced it. This Darkness flows out in the form of Horror Stories and Dark Poetry 🖤

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  • RM Stockton10 days ago

    This is beautiful, Dharrsheena! I imagined it was addressing worry. Life's worries can drag us down, and the more we worry about a problem, the heavier the burden. As the saying goes, “Worrying does not take away tomorrow's troubles. It takes away today's peace.” This was a beautiful poem, with layered meanings!

  • Mohammed Abdul Rahmanabout a month ago

    Hello, How are you? Hope you are doing well. Can I know where you from..??

  • John M Edwards Jr2 months ago

    Very nice.

  • A lovely metaphor for dealing with life's challenges.💙Anneliese

  • Albert John's2 months ago

    grt writing.........

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  • Jazmin Fernandez2 months ago

    Very nice dear:)

  • Oğuz Acar2 months ago

    nice :)

  • Grinder McMan2 months ago

    This is amazing work! You’re a great writer!

  • Unforgiveness surely feels like this. The quicksand. The struggle. Then you release and accept where you are and how you feel. It is forgiveness at its best. Love this poem. May I read it for my YouTube Channel and link back here?

  • Babs Iverson2 months ago

    Fabulous!!! Absolutely fabulous!!!💖💖💕

  • Vadim Kagan2 months ago


  • Adam Stanbridge3 months ago

    Another great piece of work, really enjoyed it.

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  • Anfas Mohammed3 months ago

    beautiful. 💜

  • SHRI G4 months ago

    Nice story...keep rocking

  • Alex H Mittelman 4 months ago

    This is a great piece and a great metaphor for letting things go! Very awesome! I love it!

  • Hearted and subscribed love the lesson in this poem sometimes to get better we just have to let go

  • Jarold4 months ago


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  • This was so good, I really feel like I connect with this message, feels very familiar to some aspects of life. Thank you!

  • Lisa A Lachapelle5 months ago

    Deep poem. Big heart

  • Great Poem. Really liked it!

  • So deep and compelling. The mid-section that focuses on remebering to "let go" resonates immensely with me. We often don't even realized how clenched we are going through life until we actually relax and start letting go and feeling the floating sensation mentioned in your poem.

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