You threw me off my game,
Coming in here round and pert and rolling in your affection,
So I didn't have to wonder if you meant it.
Only if I did.
And how much I did.
Or how much loving you
Was an idea.
How much loving you was about loving me,
And if loving me was worth it if I was not the kind of person
Who would love you
Unconditionally
And mean it.
To mean it on the good days was never enough.
You meant it every day there was.
And I meant it enough that breaking your heart
Broke mine.
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When I first saw him sitting on the wall, relaxed and looking out over the water, I was sure he wasn't a local. Not including children, there are only about 250 or 300 of us in this area full-time, though that number is ten-fold in the summer, and I know everyone at least by sight or by family resemblance. And yet, the way he sat looked familiar and started my mind sorting and discarding among the families I knew, not quite like this one, not quite like that one.
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Oof it’s heavy. The closing lines are especially poignant, and you’ve used the spacing here really nicely, especially when contrasting short and long.
This certainly packed a punch. And each line added another emotional layer of complexity. Very well done!
If I could give my younger self one bit of advice it would be, hold your self respect high, and smash hearts if that's what it takes. Even when your own heart breaks too.
Ish...this is a hard read...but I feel we are pulled along by your just beautiful words. Well done.
Aww man, this was sad. But beautifully written!
So relatable, Hannah!
Ouch! Those last lines!! 😔👏
I've had so many people where breaking their heart broke mine too, although it was just platonic. But I've never had anyone whose heart broke when they broke mine. Loved your poem!
This is crazy good, Hannah. Real, raw, honest. You see the world for what it is, not what we imagine it to be.
Oh Hannah. I felt my heart breaking a little too. This was excellent.
Excellent job!!
Wow. Beautiful piece and those last two lines are heartbreaking.
Whoa!!! I think my heart is broken as well after reading that. Loved it!
This was heartbreaking and surprising with that twist at the end!! Beautifully executed unexpected end to a "love" story!! I enjoyed this!!
Beautiful, I'm glad this was my first notification after the site was fixed.