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Generic[?] Haiku II

Trying for the Microcosm

By Rob AngeliPublished 7 months ago 1 min read
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Generic[?] Haiku II
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fall transmuting burnt-

out green of summer

soon into red gold

-R. Angeli

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Make the universe your companion, always bearing in mind the true nature of things--mountains and rivers, trees and grasses, and humanity--and enjoy the falling blossoms and scattering leaves.

One should know that a hokku is made by combining things.

The secret of poetry lies in treading the middle path between the reality and the vacuity of the the world.

One must first of all concentrate one's thoughts on an object. Once one's mind achieves a state of concentration and the space between oneself and the object has disappeared, the essential nature of the object can be perceived.

When you are composing a verse, let there not be a hair's breadth separating your mind from what you write. Quickly say what is on your mind; never hesitate a moment.

Composition must occur in an instant, like a woodcutter felling a huge tree, or a swordsman leaping at his enemy. It is also like cutting a ripe watermelon with a sharp knife or like taking a large bite into a pear.

Is there any good in saying everything?

-Matsuo Basho (1644-1694) From his treatise on poetry, LEARN FROM THE PINE

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Rob Angeli

sunt lacrimae rerum et mentem mortalia tangunt

There are tears of things, and mortal objects touch the mind.

-Virgil Aeneid I.462

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  • Donna Fox (HKB)7 months ago

    I loved your haiku, very creative word-age there!! Great work Rob!

  • Mackenzie Davis7 months ago

    DAMN, mic drop. "Transmuting" is a perfect choice. And you have the breath pause too...A perfect haiku, my friend. Love that you included info on the form too; always good to know about the form you're writing in! Not that I'd expect anything less from you. ;)

  • 👏 Angeli: I envy your skill of creating beautiful word still lifes. Distilling an essence yet leaving its magnificence is no easy thing. 🧡👏🧡

  • Cathy holmes7 months ago

    Wonderful haiku and I love after stuff.

  • Zara Blume7 months ago

    Gorgeous haiku about my favorite time of year. 🍂 I especially love the use of the words ‘transmuting’ and ‘burnt.’ Not only is it a vivid description of the changes in the natural world, fiery in color—but also a great metaphor for what autumn symbolizes metaphysically. Walking through fire. Death and rebirth. A purification and transmutation on a personal level as we head into winter, the home stretch of a solar calendar year and closing of a cycle.

  • Kristen Balyeat7 months ago

    I'm pretty obsessed with this haiku, Rob! Gorgeous work! Also love the quote from Basho! Going to explore further.

  • Your Haiku reminded me of this line from Taylor Swift's song, Daylight: I once believed love would be burning red, but it's golden. I loved your Haiku!

  • Cendrine Marrouat7 months ago

    Excellent!

  • Novel Allen7 months ago

    Matsuo is very wise. Thoughts are fleeting, they come in fast and rush away like the wind. Catch and harness them fast. Vaey true. This Haiku is so whimsical, I so love fall leaves, even the bareness of winter has its beauty. And i just got an idea for a poem. Fascinating, is it not.

  • Gerard DiLeo7 months ago

    Great imagery.

  • Celia in Underland7 months ago

    Nothing about your work is generic.Beautifully written and symbolic on many levels. Stunning 🤍

  • lovely haiku and words about hokku -- thanks for sharing the wisdom -- chomp -- a juicy pear!

  • Alex H Mittelman 7 months ago

    Like red gold! Fantastic haiku!

  • Ashley Lima7 months ago

    Stunning 😍

  • Alexander McEvoy7 months ago

    Wonderful poem :) Hard disagree on the “ Quickly say what is on your mind; never hesitate a moment” part of the educational aspect lol If I did that, none of the poetry I write would be any good lol

  • Chloe7 months ago

    Wow… I loved this imagery! Your way with words is so vivid 😃 Awesome!!

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