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Freedom of Language

The vehicle for our thoughts

By Mohammed DarasiPublished 7 months ago Updated 7 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - October 2023
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Freedom of Language
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These ideas forever floating around my mind

Distorted by the lack of expression

Essence of words formed with no language

Stuck between two routes

The first immature, not able to perform

The second new, still developing its form

Unable to choose nor transform

Embryonic thoughts stunted, ungrown

Suspended

Between neurons forever lost…

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Thoughts lost to a swarm of confusion

New terms and building blocks infusing

Seared in the mind

Imprinted into lines

Paving roads for the inclusion

of all thoughts flowing out of exclusion

No longer trapped

Limited by the lack of an outlet

A language mature enough and ripe with

Avenues to explore

And words galore

-

Words now catapult into existence

Free and happy to be of assistance

When expressing ideas in persistence

in my mind

No longer trapped and forgotten

Now that vehicles came trodden

on top of language

called grammar

and similes

and metaphors

and poetry.

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I moved to the UK when I was around 12 years old, and had to learn a new language (Native language being Arabic), which was difficult and confusing for a while, but eventually it all turned out well.

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About the Creator

Mohammed Darasi

I write fiction, poetry and occasional articles about interesting topics. I recently created a website (just because) which I will be posting my writing in (among other things). it would be great if you check it out. https://mindpit.co.uk/

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  • Lana V Lynx3 months ago

    Multi-lingual people are so cool, especially when they can put words into verses not in their native language. This one is great!

  • Story Room6 months ago

    Congratulations on your Top Story,

  • Beauty Ufuomaefe7 months ago

    👌💪💪💪

  • Test7 months ago

    Congratulations on your Top Story,

  • Hannah Moore7 months ago

    I am dissapointingly mono-linguistic, and I felt like this just gave me a little taste of frustration and flow in picking up a new language.

  • Matthew Fromm7 months ago

    congrats on the well deserved top story!

  • Betty-Ann7 months ago

    congrats blessings

  • Great job...congrats on your top story

  • L.C. Schäfer7 months ago

    This is brilliant, I feel the frustration, nearly like claustrophobic at the start, and then the relief of breaking free later 😁

  • JBaz7 months ago

    This has a satisfying rap beat to it. The words flow like musical notes Congratulations

  • Joe Patterson7 months ago

    Nice work. Congratulations on your top story.

  • Tressa Rose7 months ago

    This flow was good! Really great job!

  • Donna Fox (HKB)7 months ago

    I love this, it's so well written and relatable. Even to a native English speaker! Great work and congratulations on Top Story!

  • Congratulations on your Top Story🎉

  • Mel Legre7 months ago

    Well done

  • Rachel Deeming7 months ago

    It sure did turn out well! Congrats on TS!

  • Cathy holmes7 months ago

    Beautifully done.

  • A wonderful wander round your mind and thoughts

  • Sian N. Clutton7 months ago

    Love this! So insightful and poetic. Well done!

  • I loved the transformation through each stanza! Language is a powerful tool! Brilliant poem!

  • J. Delaney-Howe7 months ago

    This was fantastic. I read it again out loud and it is very powerful.

  • The first immature, not able to perform The second new, still developing its form I related to this so much in regards to my Poetry writing! I’ve been studying new words recently and expanding my vocabulary to try to better express the ideas I have, because I feel very limited by the ‘immature’ language I have! So reading it with this perspective and relating on this kind of level I was so surprised by your authors note at the end 🕊️✨ That must have been so challenging to land in a new country / school/ language / culture at that age. I moved schools at 10 and that was hard enough without all of the extra pressures you had. (Although to be fair…in Scotland if you move 10 miles down the road you have a new language going on 😂😉)

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