Dam-Cracking
Your Eyes
We share the same rigid spine,
don’t we? The same stiff
upper lip, and eyes
backed with
concrete.
Two carefully crafted dams holding back million-
year-old rivers, ever silently waiting
for the right moment to fail,
to let the catastrophe
come calling.
To allow the impounded
soul-water to burst free, to be struck
dumb, alive and deafening.
You look at me with
this calm recognition that
awakens lost memories
of an old broken
path to the
sea.
You look
past me and
see the reservoir; the
surging, dam-cracking relief
and desire within me.
You must know
that I see it in
you too.
About the Creator
Rae Solace
An amateur in all regards except taste. Fiction writer, poet, jewelry-maker, craft-maker, painter.
English Creative Writing BA.
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Comments (7)
This is lovely. Your language is easy to follow, yet the more I read, the more I notice. I especially enjoyed "You look at me with / this calm recognition that / awakens lost memories / of an old broken / path to the / sea." Your use of line breaks there was masterful.
Crikey. Holding back is at a whole new level here. Fabulous!
You perfectly captured the thick air that resides between two people with so many words unspoken. Beautiful poem, looking forward to more!
A poem with both power and restraint! Wonderful!
Oh! Oh my gosh. I read this out loud and had to applaude. Every word was packed with soul and I felt each one like it was that one drop of water that finally split the concrete apart. Beautifully done! Congratulations on your Runner's Up placement. Take my ❤️ and subscription and go :)
Nicely done. Congrats.
Wow!! This is so powerful and lovely. There’s so much imagery, and depth of meaning here and I am here for it! 💕