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Call of the Ocean

A Crown Cinquain

By Dharrsheena Raja SegarranPublished 2 months ago 1 min read
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The wind

It was blowing

She closed her eyes and felt

How nice it is to feel something

Unseen

~~~~~

Unseen

Therefore unheard

But the sea had many

Secrets and mysteries untold

Curious

~~~~~

Curious

She squinted hard

It seemed to her the waves

Were beckoning her to follow

Should she?

~~~~~

Should she

Follow her heart

And jump into the sea

Or listen to the warning bells

Ringing

~~~~~

Ringing

In both her ears

Swimming underwater

Kept going deeper till she found

Answers

~~~~~

A Crown Cinquain is a sequence of five cinquain stanzas functioning to construct a larger poem. The syllabic count for each stanza is 2-4-6-8-2.

The last line of the previous cinquain stanza is repeated as the first line of the next cinquain stanza.

The final line of the last cinquain stanza does not have to equal the first line of the first cinquain stanza, but it is an option.

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Dharrsheena Raja Segarran

I'm a Certified Nutritionist 🌱 and these are what I mostly write:
〰️ Fiction (Horror/Thriller)
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〰️ Poetry

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  • Roy Stevens19 days ago

    Now that is beautiful! You're digging deeper here Dharrsheena and coming up with material that feels more vulnerable but also more distilled and affecting. This poem is truly lovely, one of the better pieces I've seen at Vocal!

  • Erwin Smith25 days ago

    Very beautiful poem🍃

  • Denise Larkinabout a month ago

    Creatively crafted poem with lots of visual that gives the feel of the sea.

  • Deborah Robinsonabout a month ago

    Stunning imagery.

  • suman mohanabout a month ago

    Superb! I like the sequences of stanzas.

  • Rick Henry Christopherabout a month ago

    Very interesting and thought provoking. Work well done.

  • Novel Allenabout a month ago

    Very informative and enjoyable.

  • Stephanie J. Bradberryabout a month ago

    Love it. It captures the soothing yet beckoning nature of the ocean.

  • Ward Norcuttabout a month ago

    The careful construction of words is often overlooked. Yours flows very nicely.

  • C. Rommial Butlerabout a month ago

    You honored the form well! Enjoyable to read, as always!

  • Lilly Cooperabout a month ago

    Not being a poet, I'm always interested to read about the poem styles. I like the imagery in this one :)

  • Magnificent Poetry 💯✌️❤️I love the Construction 😉

  • Kiki Le Tigreabout a month ago

    Cooool

  • Sonia Heidi Unruhabout a month ago

    I've never heard of a Crown Cinquain before but now I will just HAVE to try it! I love how the structure flows and even looks on the screen like a wave, and how the repetition of lines underscores the rhythm of waves breaking on a beach. Form and function merge.

  • Adamu Salisuabout a month ago

    Good work. Well thought out.

  • Lisa A Lachapelle2 months ago

    Beautiful

  • Adamu Salisu2 months ago

    Good work. I like it.

  • Dhawy Febrianti2 months ago

    Oh oh, my idol. It’s fantastic as always!

  • Oneg In The Arctic2 months ago

    I really enjoyed this and the story you told throughout the poem, and the structure is also super cool! Might have to try this style of poem too soon :)

  • Lori Melton2 months ago

    Love this! ❤️

  • Oh wow I really liked this! I want to try this style

  • Wow, I love the imagery of this one! Well done! The emotion is very present in this... and quite relatable.

  • Caroline Jane2 months ago

    This flows so well (sorry pun in there I know) I love it. 🥰

  • KJ Aartila2 months ago

    Nicely done - and I could feel it! :)

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