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but i see rays of light

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By Heather HublerPublished 3 months ago 1 min read
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your flowery words

barely cover the stench

of the wrongs you can't

humble yourself

to make right.

regurgitated platitudes

smelling of bile

and bullshit

pile up around you

choking out the sun

leaving you to do

your slithering in the dark

where no one is the wiser.

but i see rays of light.

they're slowly bleeding

through the bullet holes

we sprayed, volleyed

from the cells of shame

you tried to keep us in,

separated and divided.

but whispers swirl and footprints

remain, you can't contain

the fall out.

we've found each other and

reformed into a smoking gun,

pointed at your

disingenuous facade.

bang.

the time for revelation is here.

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Dedicated to all those that suffer in silence.

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  • Angie the Archivist 📚🪶2 months ago

    Such emotive imagery! ‘your flowery words barely cover the stench of the wrongs you can't humble yourself to make right.‘ Excellent!

  • L.C. Schäfer3 months ago

    we've found each other and/reformed into a smoking gun... bang! - I love this bit!

  • Gina C.3 months ago

    So compelling and well-stated. I'm especially in love with the "but i see rays of light" line - just mesmerizing 😍

  • sleepy drafts3 months ago

    Damn. Beautifully said, Heather. 💗 This is a powerful piece.

  • Rene Peters3 months ago

    Beautifully written!

  • Oneg In The Arctic3 months ago

    DAMN “ but i see rays of light. they're slowly bleeding through the bullet holes we sprayed, volleyed from the cells of shame you tried to keep us in,” REVOLUTION

  • Mother Combs3 months ago

    OMG this is so deep and beautifully written, Heather

  • Grz Colm3 months ago

    Interesting thoughts and idea here Heather! You always pick the best words… I love the use of “slithering” in this piece!👍 Be well! ☺️

  • Holly Pheni3 months ago

    Very moving, I love your choice of visual imagery here.

  • Daphsam3 months ago

    So well written, I love these thought provoking lines: "but i see rays of light. they're slowly bleeding through the bullet holes we sprayed, volleyed from the cells of shame you tried to keep us in,"

  • Nobody does dark better than you Heather

  • Oooo, like Cathy, I'm thinking of someone in particular. Your opening was a hugeeeee hint. I thought you would be the last to be wronged but boy was I wrong! There's like a long list after you! Time for revelation is here indeed! Loved your poem!

  • I'm sorry, I'm humbled, I'm..., ...blown away by the power of your writing, Heather.

  • Kenny Penn3 months ago

    Oh my this one is so good Heather! I know a couple I could dedicate this brilliant piece to right now.

  • Cathy holmes3 months ago

    I am thinking of one person in particular, and gagging on the stench. Needless to say I love this, even if I am dead wrong. (insert giggle emoji which I have no clue to do on my laptop). Love ya, Empress Nerd.

  • Randy Baker3 months ago

    Whew. Powerful stuff. Those first five lines set the poem off with a bang (pun intended). You weren't messing around!

  • Rachel Deeming3 months ago

    Heather, this poem is a powerhouse. Love the ending of retaliation. Made me grit my teeth and think "Yeah!"

  • Gee, this opened so hard. This is remarkably powerful. Each word strikes harder than the next. Great poem!

  • JBaz3 months ago

    Your opening line is brilliant and sets the pace for the rest. Hard hitting and direct. You must be tired of me saying you outdid yourself…..but you did it again.

  • marie e ehlenbach3 months ago

    All can do wrong!

  • Paul Stewart3 months ago

    Crikey...this might be my favourite of yours yet. That would be a hard one to pick...but this is exceptional. Love the flow and the uncompromising, yet still graceful and classy wording of it all. Well bloody done, pal! omnibus patientibus coniungere

  • Babs Iverson3 months ago

    Impressive & inspiring!!! ♥️💕

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