your flowery words
barely cover the stench
of the wrongs you can't
humble yourself
to make right.
regurgitated platitudes
smelling of bile
and bullshit
pile up around you
choking out the sun
leaving you to do
your slithering in the dark
where no one is the wiser.
but i see rays of light.
they're slowly bleeding
through the bullet holes
we sprayed, volleyed
from the cells of shame
you tried to keep us in,
separated and divided.
but whispers swirl and footprints
remain, you can't contain
the fall out.
we've found each other and
reformed into a smoking gun,
pointed at your
disingenuous facade.
bang.
the time for revelation is here.
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Dedicated to all those that suffer in silence.
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Comments (24)
Such emotive imagery! ‘your flowery words barely cover the stench of the wrongs you can't humble yourself to make right.‘ Excellent!
we've found each other and/reformed into a smoking gun... bang! - I love this bit!
So compelling and well-stated. I'm especially in love with the "but i see rays of light" line - just mesmerizing 😍
Damn. Beautifully said, Heather. 💗 This is a powerful piece.
Beautifully written!
DAMN “ but i see rays of light. they're slowly bleeding through the bullet holes we sprayed, volleyed from the cells of shame you tried to keep us in,” REVOLUTION
OMG this is so deep and beautifully written, Heather
Interesting thoughts and idea here Heather! You always pick the best words… I love the use of “slithering” in this piece!👍 Be well! ☺️
Very moving, I love your choice of visual imagery here.
So well written, I love these thought provoking lines: "but i see rays of light. they're slowly bleeding through the bullet holes we sprayed, volleyed from the cells of shame you tried to keep us in,"
Nobody does dark better than you Heather
Perfect line
Oooo, like Cathy, I'm thinking of someone in particular. Your opening was a hugeeeee hint. I thought you would be the last to be wronged but boy was I wrong! There's like a long list after you! Time for revelation is here indeed! Loved your poem!
I'm sorry, I'm humbled, I'm..., ...blown away by the power of your writing, Heather.
Oh my this one is so good Heather! I know a couple I could dedicate this brilliant piece to right now.
I am thinking of one person in particular, and gagging on the stench. Needless to say I love this, even if I am dead wrong. (insert giggle emoji which I have no clue to do on my laptop). Love ya, Empress Nerd.
Whew. Powerful stuff. Those first five lines set the poem off with a bang (pun intended). You weren't messing around!
Heather, this poem is a powerhouse. Love the ending of retaliation. Made me grit my teeth and think "Yeah!"
Holy shit. That 'Bang' made me jump! Very well articulated! 🤍
Gee, this opened so hard. This is remarkably powerful. Each word strikes harder than the next. Great poem!
Your opening line is brilliant and sets the pace for the rest. Hard hitting and direct. You must be tired of me saying you outdid yourself…..but you did it again.
All can do wrong!
Crikey...this might be my favourite of yours yet. That would be a hard one to pick...but this is exceptional. Love the flow and the uncompromising, yet still graceful and classy wording of it all. Well bloody done, pal! omnibus patientibus coniungere
Impressive & inspiring!!! ♥️💕