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"Bless You!"

A short and silly poem about ideas.

By Caroline JanePublished about a year ago Updated about a year ago 1 min read
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"Bless You!"
Photo by Elena Mozhvilo on Unsplash

Ideas are like sneezes.

Both symptomatic of dust,

fairy or matter.

Taunting human sense in shafts of light.

Daring to be caught,

to be ignited,

to be excited,

in debilitating orgasmic consumptive delight.

Until they are lost.

To untickled sense.

Become emissions, undispensed.

Left to drift in fevers of synaptic frustration.

A malevolence of expectation in deflation;

where the exhilaration of amelioration is lost to evaporation.

It is total anticipation annihilation incarnation.

Oh, if only one could guarantee

that the motes of dust,

fairy or matter,

would deliver the expected consumptive release

I should happily walk around

paper in hand

ready to capture whatever is set free.

Oh, to think, how full my bin

would be!

surreal poetry
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About the Creator

Caroline Jane

Warm-blooded vertebrate, domesticated with a preference for the wild. Howls at the moon and forages on the dark side of it. Laughs like a hyena. Fuelled by good times and fairy dust. Writes obsessively with no holes barred.

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  • Test3 months ago

    Perfect!

  • Denise E Lindquistabout a year ago

    Nice!😊💕

  • Stephanie J. Bradberryabout a year ago

    So unique. It would be fun to read your poem side-by-side with Paul Stewart's Top Story poem about being a tissue.

  • Mariann Carrollabout a year ago

    Beautiful, love the message in the poem

  • Holly Pheniabout a year ago

    This is fabulous, creative, humorous-- subscribed. :)

  • Gina C.about a year ago

    This is wonderful!! I was expecting a different kind of wonderful from the title, but I really love THIS wonderful! It turned out to be super complex with so many amazing lines. Well done, Caroline! 😍

  • This was so creative and brilliant! I loved it!

  • Kelli Sheckler-Amsdenabout a year ago

    Clever, I enjoyed it very much

  • Babs Iversonabout a year ago

    Well done!!! Loving it!!!💕💖😊

  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    What a great analogy. This is wonderful. Love it.

  • This is fun and a wonderfully clever analogy

  • Dana Stewartabout a year ago

    Brilliant! I loved so many lines, but 'in debilitating orgasmic consumptive delight' resonated to my core. Then 'A malevolence of expectation in deflation' really pinpoints the feeling. Great work, exciting imagery. Oh, the woes of art!

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