After The Show
Four Poems on How We Felt At The Show And Afterwards
This is a collaborative poem between my good friend Melissa Ingoldsby and myself. It is for the After The Parade Vocal Challenge.
The concept was watching a show together and how each of us felt during the show, and then how we felt when we were home alone.
The Vocal editor is fine but has limits and sometimes that sets a good challenge.
We decided to have The Show and Home as separate entities but set in columns next to each other. Melissa first then me.
So there are four poems woven together to tell the story.
The show was "The Last Waltz" the final concert by The Band, though this happened before Melissa was born. If you are unaware of it you can watch it on Amazon Prime
This poem is best viewed on a computer screen as there are no tabs and mobile devices, especially in portrait mode mess up the format though it is still readable. The screenshot versions below should show properly on any device:
The editor decided to ignore the spaces so had to add stops to space it .
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Melissa
The Show .........................π
Cloudy in my brain...............π.......At the show, it was perfect
I sought out your kindness.....π.......It was our perfect night,
Your poetry.........................π......Watching that grand music stand
Linked in my brain................π.....Home
Suffocating my sadness..........π.......Melancholy hits my ear,
Bright, too bright..................π.......I missed the tone
I hate summer days...............π.......Of your conversation
But summer nights................π.......And brotherhood in my heart,
Are long and brilliant.............π.......Iβll check my heart
Listening to lush sounds.........π.......To reverberate to yours,
And sympathetic notes...........π.......A dream Iβll link to you,
...................................................π.....Of our musical interlude
Mike
The Show...........................π.......Home
We Sat Together....................π.......I Loved Tonight,
Holding Hands......................π.......Being With You
Singing Songs........................π.......Now I'm Alone
Our Favourite Band................π.......Sadder It's True
Through The Encore...............π.......I Wish I Could Call
The Lights Went Down............π.......Hear Your Voice
We Left Together....................π.......I Know You Are Sleeping
Goodbye Now.........................π.......Dreams of Joy
Took The Bus Home................π.......I Want To Be With You
A Little Sad............................π.......I'll See You Soon
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Comments (8)
What an awesome idea! Loved it
What a fun concept- and such a great choice of topic. You two really did a great job showing the conflicting feelings of joy at the show but sadness knowing that this is going to be the last.
I like collaborative work. I actually created one with an entire Creative Writing class by asking them to answer a question and after reading their written responses I chose one or two lines from what they wrote, forming the poem. Now that I have seen yours, I think I will submit it. Good Job!
This was so wonderful! Loved the collab
I love how creative this is!
Very nice. Well done to both of you
Very original! Love it.
Impressive and beautiful!!!ππ