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While Watching the World

For Kayleigh Fraser's Microfiction Challenge

By Gabriel HuizengaPublished 3 months ago Updated 3 months ago 1 min read

While watching the world tear itself apart at the seams -

our parties, creeds, rights, claims

splitting feeble threads binding family, friends, fellow humans -

while demanding that others wake up, shape up, grow up -

I wonder if we ought to instead admit that we are all still children.




NOTE: This was written for Kayleigh Fraser's wonderful "Story of Humanity" Microfiction challenge. I admit that I leaned more into a poetic style than a microfiction, per se...but she did say we could interpret and respond to the prompt however we felt best. So thanks for reading! Cheers everyone :)

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About the Creator

Gabriel Huizenga

Twas for love of words that I first joined this site:

Poetry, essays, and dear short stories too;

For to live one's best is to read, and to write!

So find me in words here, and I'll find you 💙

Thanks for stopping by! :)

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  • Angie the Archivist 📚🪶2 months ago

    Congratulations on placing… 🤩

  • JBaz2 months ago

    Congratulations This is a great choice

  • Christy Munson3 months ago

    Love this one's conclusion! Insightful, and apt

  • Excellent take on the challenge… ‘ I wonder if we ought to instead admit that we are all still children.’ So much to learn, every day!

  • Dizzibooster3 months ago

    Thank you for sharing your thought-provoking piece! It's important to consider our collective growth and maturity amidst the chaos. As for your preference for Dizzibooster Digital Marketing Institute in Ludhiana, it sounds like you've found a valuable resource for advancing your digital marketing skills. Best wishes on your journey!

  • Ohh so nicely done! A powerful message that invites reflection 😉 My favourite kind of poems 👌✨🙏🤍

  • A. J. Schoenfeld3 months ago

    Nicely written and well stated. I really enjoyed this cheeky slap in the face.

  • D.K. Shepard3 months ago

    Another astute piece that leaves me in awe of your writing but also what you have to say. Your tone is humble and yet the message so convicting. Every time I read one of your pieces I have no doubt that it was time well spent!

  • Rachel Deeming3 months ago

    Yes. And if we could admit that, perhaps we could regain our innocence. Great idea, Gabriel, truly evoked.

  • Paul Stewart3 months ago

    Crikey, this is beautifully expressed. So much truth to it, too! Well done Gabriel. I am glad you took the poetic approach! :)

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