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The Story Of X or What The Walls Told Us

My Second Entry For The Vocal "If Walls Could Talk" Challenge

By Mike Singleton - MikeydredPublished about a year ago 3 min read
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The Narthex

Introduction

This is my second entry for the Vocal "If Walls Could Talk" Challenge which you can read about below. It is essentially a piece of chat fiction (Here is the Wikipedia definition which gives a little of the history of the format), though in mine it is the walls talking to each other after an unforeseen happening.

The Story Of X or What The Walls Told Us

"If Walls Could Talk", now there's a thought.

Someone had died on the floor of the narthex, the temperature had been sub-zero during the night, the main church door was locked because the clergyman did not want any undesirables in his church (especially the sick or the poor) and the body of the person who we know as X was on the floor, very cold.

W1: "That is terrible, it's not just sad, but disgusting and terrible"

W2: "Maybe, it's for the best, at least they won't suffer anymore, but yes it is terrible. At times like these you almost want Heaven and God to exist"

W3: "We've had this argument before, you deny the existence of God, Heaven and Hell, yet here we are, four very knowledgeable walls in a church narthex, talking and arguing with each other. Are we not just as unbelievable as heaven? We still exist but what would normal people say if they were told about us?"

W4: "Exactly, X was an incredible person but thanks to others' selfishness and cruelty they have ended up dying here despite always being there for others and always helping them when they could. X was the church's definition of a saint, unlike our local clergyman"

W1: "They used to be reasonably well off, had a house, and were good at their job, but always helped others in and out of work. Always had a pound for the homeless and worked in the soup kitchen."

W2: "They gone passed over for promotions and bonuses because others claimed his work for their own, and when X eventually spoke out they were accused of harassment (completely fabricated) and that resulted in X being dismissed. One person stood up for X but that had no effect"

W3: "I find it quite amusing that the company is looking like it will go under due to the fact that the people left don't have X to solve their problems and are now blaming X for the failure despite the fact X was hounded out"

W4: "X still tried to help people but the dismissal hit them really hard, he could not afford to keep up their rental payments and no one would help, so X became homeless and once or twice the people who had forced them out of their job found X and abused them because they blamed X for the fact that they would soon be out of work. The local police were not too bothered, it was just some vagrant"

W1: "Even the street people despised X because there was no help of food for them now"

W2: "X became a virtual hermit, sleeping on park benches and in bus shelters, he went to the Salvation Army but they wouldn't help because they decided that X's sexuality was not appropriate, they accused X of prostitution although that was a complete lie. The clergyman in this church is close with the Salvation Army and a bully who thinks no one should receive charity because they must have offended the Lord."

W3: "The temperatures dropped, so X hoped the heated church would be open, the door was warm but locked so X led on the floor in the narthex"

W4: "......and froze to death, the clergyman will be mad as hell dealing with this, but he deserves it. He is part of the reason that X died."

Then the walls went quiet.........

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Nice work

Very well written. Keep up the good work!

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  1. Excellent storytelling

    Original narrative & well developed characters

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    Niche topic & fresh perspectives

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  • Donna Fox (HKB)about a year ago

    Again, I find your format choice intriguing! I like your use of dialogue as a way to drive the story forward. Your story is engaging and well written!

  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    Nicely done.

  • That was very well done and interestingly written. A sad ending and I would not want to be part of that particular church but there are many morals to this story.

  • Holly Pheniabout a year ago

    Very poignant, friend!

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