The world was calm; the scent of the Old Man's mush filled the air.
The little fly couldn't resist. Buzz. His tiny wings propelled toward the soupy breakfast; guided by instinct.
Boink! An invisible, netty trampoline caught him without rebound. He swayed in the breeze, suspended in air, held by a circular ghost.
Buzz: vibrations of desperation. The more he resisted, the more entangled in the circle he became.
Buzz. Buzz.
Then, two vibrations in return. Footsteps?
three...four...five... eight footsteps.
Uh-oh.
The spider advanced; guided by instinct.
The little fly winced; awaiting his fate.
He, too, would now become mush.
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Gina C.
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Comments (29)
Amazing
Never thought I'd feel sorry for a fly! 😁
Such beautiful language. I love your descriptions of the web. Spiders fascinate me. There were studies I read about a while back that indicated their webs may also emit electricity that attracts certain charged insects. Such amazing little creatures. Horrifying from the perspective of insects though.
It’s the old man’s fault! 🤣. Great story … Gina 😎🥰
This is awesome and so well-written! I always love your descriptions ❤️
I love the patterning - tough to do in so few words, but it is really effective
At least its innards will become mush. The outtards will remain as tombstone until someone gets the broom out & knocks that cobweb down.
You've got some brilliant descriptions here "invisible, netty trampoline" and "circular ghost" are my favorites. Great job with this one!
Was this just re-published somehow? Call me a stupid Boomer, but it showed up in my feed as new about an hour ago.
Your story telling skills is amazing. I love the Buzz sound. Really enjoyed reading it.
Great title, great micro story. I feel bad for this fly, but always swat the houseflys. :) Also, I just got a notification that you published this, yet I see older comments. So weird.
Awesome writing!
Awww, poor little fly! Said the spider before turning him into mush 🤣 I loved this so much!
Now I feel sorry for the fly. Lol. Great story, my friend.
"Come into my parlor," said the spider to the fly. Well done!
Fly, fly, fly 😊❤️
Okay, this one's a bit "mushy" for my taste. Too bad it wasn't a mosquito. Flies can be annoying, but skeeters push me right over the edge.
Oh no! Poor fly!
Excellent job
Oh, poor fly!! But spider gotta eat, lol. I love how your beautiful mind works, taking us to this every day occurrence but making it feel personal. Loved it, my friend :)
This was brilliant! Perfect for micro fiction. Poor little fly.
Such a beautifully vivid little story, Gina! You packed a lot into this in such a delicate way- the circle of life/instinct. I LOVE bugs- this was truly delightful.
I love this. Spider symbolism is a favorite of mine, and I like the double meanings of mush.
Good riddance to the fly! lol. This is great, Gina! Awesome work, as ever!
Ahhh. The circle! Well done. Love the effects! 🥰 (Now, I challenge you to write the same story from the Spiders perspective or the old man’s. Goodness, so many possibilities!)