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Snowing Home

A Snow Micro

By Judey Kalchik Published 6 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - February 2024
Snowing Home
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"Snow's not so cold, after all", she marveled aloud as she watched the fat fluffy flakes fall around her outstretched hand.

Ellen had been nervous about attacking the rapidly escalating blanket of snow; this had always been Steve's job, and one that he used to enjoy. Clearing away the snow in front of their home gave him satisfaction, he always told her. It's what the man of the house should do.

Now there was no more man of the house, and Ellen added this to the many tasks she'd needed to conquer on her own. Ellen dreaded the work and the cold.

Fascinated, she watched her warm woolen mitten become rimed with snowy crystals, and although she could see the fibers become darker from the moisture she couldn't feel the cold on her fingers.

She couldn't see the shovel, either, even though she knew she'd dropped it right over there, next to the mailbox, when she'd turned to go back to the house.

All she'd needed was to sit and rest, and maybe get warm. 'A little break' is what Steve used to say. A little break to catch his breath.

Since she'd sat down at the end of the driveway her breathing had been slower, with a lovely warmth making her drowsy. Falling snow was bringing a glow to the night sky. Ellen leaned, tipping her head up to see the snow whirling.

Steve floated towards her.

"Give me your hand honey, I'll take you home," said Steve tenderly.

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Comments (23)

  • Anna 5 months ago

    Congrats on Top Story!🥳

  • Joe O’Connor5 months ago

    Such a gentle and lovely story, and what a nice ending:) Loved this line-“Fascinated, she watched her warm woolen mitten become rimed with snowy crystals”.

  • ROCK 5 months ago

    YAY! Top Story and well deserved!

  • Ali SP6 months ago

    Congrats on your top story. It’s a wonderful love story and I am glad Steve was there to welcome her as she took her last breaths.

  • Novel Allen6 months ago

    Such a sweet sentimental short story. A gentle nudge to a timeless love. Congrats.

  • Zoe6 months ago

    Your writing poignantly captures the blending of grief and magical realism, as Ellen's encounter with the snow transitions from a chore into a serene, possibly final, moment of reunion with Steve.

  • Harbor Benassa6 months ago

    I love the foreshadowing tucked away in the middle when you describe the mittens becoming dark and her being unable to feel her fingers. Great take on the prompt

  • Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • J. Delaney-Howe6 months ago

    This is beautiful Judey. The ending hit me in the heart.

  • Tina D'Angelo6 months ago

    Beautiful. Simply beautiful.

  • Kendall Defoe 6 months ago

    Top Story Time!🏅

  • Mackenzie Davis6 months ago

    Oh whoa. The domestic scene utterly transformed by the end. What a perfect narrative surprise, and so emotional. 😭 This is excellent.

  • Randy Baker6 months ago

    I did not see that coming. Great job!

  • ImperfectlyPerfect6 months ago

    I love this..Nice transition into the afterlife

  • Melissa Ingoldsby6 months ago

    Very sad and sweet ending, I really appreciate the way you weave the tragedy and cathartic moments so well

  • Cathy holmes6 months ago

    Beautiful writing. I both loved and hated the ending. That she died was sad. That Steve was there, was smoothly and beautifully written, like it was meant to be. Excellent.

  • Test6 months ago

    This had such a delicate touch to it -Really beautiful, I could picture Steve holding out is hand towards her 🤍

  • Omggg!! Did she like, die??!! Even if she didn't and this is me being daft, I loved your story!

  • What a beautiful way to be welcomed home.

  • JBaz6 months ago

    Touching and in someway lovey although sad. You treated this with such reverence. Beautiful Judey

  • Mother Combs6 months ago

    So bittersweet. Lovely

  • Kenny Penn6 months ago

    Great entry Judey, with a bittersweet ending. You did a great job giving so much of Ellen's story and using so little words.

  • Babs Iverson6 months ago

    Captivating microfiction & loved it!!!💕♥️♥️

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