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My little Brother

Inhibit to follow through...

By HandsomelouiiThePoet (Lonzo ward)Published 22 days ago 1 min read
My little Brother
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From the window

I watched

As he,

Round Rock the other side of the road.

He abodes the same facial expression...

Gaping stoutly forward.

The stormwater swooshed over the windshield of the Ford F150.

I grabbed my phone and endeavor

To try at another buzz...

No Signal

I knew that no time soon would Mark, rostrum from the Arcade Game.

My little brother was not a techie, but whenever mom gave the “ok “ for us to Runnalong to the Arcade we stayed for hours.

Mark was determined to beat a record 🏆

Finally, Mom called

Mark won some money.


About the Creator

HandsomelouiiThePoet (Lonzo ward)

Your Mind is

A Wonderland of

Your Imagination

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  • Chibi5 days ago

    Very nice!

  • Katrina Cain5 days ago

    Great writing and vivid imagery x

  • Novel Allen16 days ago

    Great expressions, You have a way with words.

  • Very good

  • M. 18 days ago

    Hello fellow reader! Give my story a read:

  • Ahna Lewis19 days ago

    Congrats on your Top Story, Lonzo! I enjoyed this one!

  • Demie Beach20 days ago

    I really liked this. Great writing!

  • Heather N King20 days ago

    Winning money through playing video games! I love it!

  • Good job! Mark got some praise for his amazing imagination. Continue your efforts.

  • Kristen Balyeat20 days ago

    Great story, Lonzo! Congrats on the Top!

  • Phil Flannery20 days ago

    Well done getting top story

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  • Yayyyy congratulations on your Top Story!

  • Heather Hubler21 days ago

    Congratulations on Top Story!

  • Cathy holmes21 days ago

    Nicely done. Congrats on the TS

  • Marilyn Glover21 days ago

    Well done! Awesome imagination and an added plus; Mark won some 💰 Keep it up! 👏 💙 😃 🎉

  • Brenton F21 days ago

    Well Done HL!

  • Awesome 🤩 congratulations on top story!

  • Lamar Wiggins21 days ago

    Awesome! And congrats. Lonzo! 💖

  • Babs Iverson21 days ago

    Love this, Lonzo!!! Congratulations on T S!!!💖💖💕

  • Sarah Danaher21 days ago

    Well done

  • Dana Crandell21 days ago

    Congratulations on Top Story, Lonzo! Well-deserved!

  • Goodness21 days ago

    Congratulation on your top story

  • Roy Stevens21 days ago

    Congratulations on this being a Top Story Lonzo. You so very much deserve it my friend!

  • Gal Mux21 days ago

    It's a very dreamy story it feels like a childhood memory. Congrats on TS

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