Little Broken Things
1st March, Story #61/366
This one was always one to tend the little broken things, the discarded flotsam and jetsom. To see beauty in them, and swim forever in a sea of curiosity and inventiveness.
She collects these things, and keeps them in her Garden surrounded by pretty red flowers.
By the way, she'd never admit it, but she can be quite a vain creature. Red is wonderfully her colour. Her hair is just a shade or two away from blood, and long enough to hang all the way to her waist. She chooses flowers and shells to complement it, and ignores my mocking of her vanity.
She is kind as well, though, you know. Tender-hearted.
On this day, her habit has brought her nothing but heartache. She is crying, salty tracks on her pale cheeks, melting away to nothing, another broken little thing in her arms.
“But, honey,” I told her. “He isn’t breathing. He can’t. Not down here. What did you expect?”
A small boy had gone scampering out of sight when his betters were busy and distracted, and somehow fell from the boat. He was a sweet thing, still little and soft. Fresh from his mother’s skirts. A wavy mop of black hair atop rosy cheeks and dimples. Now his blue eyes stare blankly up into the gloom, and no amount of begging and salt can bring him back. She has given him the Kiss, but I'm certain it was too late. He was already Gone.
“This isn’t something I can fix, honey,” I told her, as gentle as I knew how.
When she's almost done crying, she buries him under a cairn in her Garden with an oyster pearl in his mouth, and surrounds him with bright red petals.
Just another little broken thing, preserved down here in this small corner of the world, where there's hardly eyes to see it. Not the ones that are like to count, anyway.
I watch her, flicking her shining tail in her cheaply earned grief, weeping into that waterfall of blood-red waves as if another drop of salt could do a damn bit of difference in the end.
Just another little broken thing.
Poor unfortunate souls.
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Word count (excluding note): 366
Submitted on 1st March at 22.53
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Comments (7)
A powerful and enduring depiction of sadness, skillfully combined with images and feeling.
Always loveeeeee The Little Mermaid retellings! Poor Unfortunate Souls, I see what you did there. "Red is wonderfully her colour. Her hair is just a shade or two away from blood, " Red and blood, my favourite colour!
Sad, endearing and well written.
Grieving for an ‘other’ is a striking concept. I love the little broken things, the flotsam and jetsom that she collects and keeps in her undersea garden. It evokes a striking image in my mind. A very sad and lovely tale, lovingly told.
A very emotional story that portrays grief through the metaphor of 'broken things.' This is expressive of a fact; not everything broken can be fixed, no matter how we try. The pain of grief is shown through the sadness and desperation of a loved one trying to console his grieving partner. Overall, this is a very much heartfelt story, close to my heart and brilliantly written.
Fascinating take on this tale LC!
Poor unfortunate souls. Ariel always was such a softy. And Ursula, mocking her in that way she has. And the poor parents. No hope even of recovering the body.