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Brilliant Shell

A Story Every Day in 2024 May 9th 130/366

By Rachel DeemingPublished 2 years ago Updated 2 years ago 2 min read
Top Story - May 2024
Brilliant Shell
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Please note that this should be May 10th, 131/366 which I've put at the end of this but not at the beginning. My head is not in the game. I blame Rachel Deeming.

He'd seen her before at the club. Glimpses of her through dry ice. Tantalising. He wanted her. Who was she?

Shit, he wanted her! He just needed an "in". It wouldn't happen at a club. He was funny, he knew that; not bad-looking but girls liked him for his sharpness and wit. That's what his friend, Lindsay said anyway.

*

His "in" came unexpectedly when he saw Lindsay getting out of a car and waving to its occupants, one of whom was the mystery girl. His heart jolted. He needed to talk to Lindsay.

He agonised over how to broach it and in the end texted her.

-Hey! Just saw u with some strange girls. The best type. Who were they?

When Lindsay received Sean's text, she wasn't surprised at all. But she was disappointed. She'd had a feeling from Sean's description that this gorgeous girl was Mona, who she knew from hockey but hadn't acted on it because, well, without having seen her herself, how could she be sure? Or that's what she told herself.

She also liked Sean very much. Liked. That was all. But it was more than that, deny it as she might. She looked forward to seeing him, feeling nervous excitement in anticipation. She loved his company. Ah, who was she kidding? She loved him.

Now this.

Heartbreaking.

She wondered how to play this, the green tendrils of jealousy winding their way around her heart, urging her to sabotage. She could...

But the thought of Sean feeling badly about her outweighed anything else. She'd rather have him in her life than distant and disappointed, agony though this would be.

Crushed by a crush.

Texts were exchanged, Mona's number shared and a date arranged.

*

Sean was deflated. He needed to talk to Lindsay.

-Fancy meeting up? Where r u?

Lindsay was there in a flash.

"How'd it go?"

Sean shrugged.

"Alright."

Lindsay raised her eyebrow. "Just alright?"

Sean shrugged again.

"Ah, I don't know."

"What?"

"I mean, she's nice and everything but I don't know..."

Lindsay waited.

"She's beautiful, yeah, but it's like, she's just a shell."

Sean added and without realising, gave Lindsay hope:

"Boring, you know? Not like you."

***

366 words

The sun is out and I am feeling positive. Love is most definitely in the air.

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