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Excalcifate

v. to soften or remove a hard or stony exterior, esp. gradually

By Rebekah ConardPublished 6 months ago 1 min read
First Place in the Neolomicro Challenge
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Excalcifate
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You're trying not to push her too hard. In some ways Amber has experienced more in her first twelve years than you did in your first twenty. There's no question in your mind that taking her in is the right thing to do. Still, you wish she would give you some indication of what she's feeling.

Amber came into your house three days ago. You asked if she liked her room. It was pretty plain, but you suggest that, when she's up to it, you two could shop for decorations. She shrugged and said nothing. That was fine.

The first breakfasts, lunches and dinners were uneventful. You'd open the door for small talk and receive shrugs and nods. Amber clears the table and washes her dishes without being asked. You thank her, and she nods. This is fine.

You try to check your expectations. She'll adjust at her own pace. No rush. In the meantime, you spend the evening curled up on the sofa watching primetime television on low volume with the captions on.

Then in the corner of your eye you see Amber enter the living room. She crosses in front of the TV, bowing her head as if to say "pardon me", then plants herself in the La-Z-Boy recliner. She's occupied with her phone.

"Can you turn it up?" she asks.

"Yeah, sure." You do. Then you take a breath. "Want me to change the channel or anything?"

"Nah, this is fine," punctuated by a brief, small smile.

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About the Creator

Rebekah Conard

31, She/Her, a big bi nerd

How do I write a bio that doesn't look like a dating profile? Anyway, my cat is my daughter, I crochet and cross stitch, and I can't ride a bike. Come take a peek in my brain-space, please and thanks.

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  • Christy Munson2 days ago

    Beautiful writing.

  • P. M. Starr5 months ago

    The overall most well-done piece I've read on vocal so far. Brought tears to my eyes. You deserved this win!

  • Novel Allen5 months ago

    Beautifully done. Reminds me of the many that my mother fostered, allowing them to stay as long as they wanted. Such a humane and kind approach to other side of life. Congrats on your win.

  • Sara Frederick5 months ago

    Congratulations, very nice work.

  • Wow, no doubt: this nailed the challenge. I have a great deal of admiration for your conciseness, and love this illustration of your word - it’s charming, emotionally layered and skates lightly over deep waters. Well done.

  • Alison McBain5 months ago

    So much said in so few words. A touching story. Congrats on the win!

  • Brin J.5 months ago

    💜 How wholesome. "You try to check your expectations." I love how you brought attention to respecting boundaries without needing to say it. It was just understood that that was what this was shedding light on.

  • Deasun T. Smyth5 months ago

    Congratulations! Such a deserving win. Well done👍🍁😄

  • Heather Hubler5 months ago

    Congratulations on the win! This was a lovely story. It was so sweet to see the relationship not being forced, just letting it be :)

  • TheSpinstress5 months ago

    Absolutely beautiful. Congratulations on your well-deserved win!

  • Melissa Ingoldsby5 months ago

    Very well paced and rich with a very deep story told in a sweet way, with nuanced narrative. Congratulations on your win 🏆

  • Teresa Renton5 months ago

    A perfect flash. A collaboration with, and trust of, the reader. So much packed into this small piece, into every sentence, the ‘this is fine’ ❤️. Congratulations on your win 👏

  • Abu Shama5 months ago

    This is a worthy winner. Heartwarming and gentle. Congratulations.

  • Daphsam5 months ago

    Wonderful story! Congratulations.

  • Rachel Deeming5 months ago

    This is a worthy winner. Heartwarming and gentle. Congratulations.

  • Jennifer David5 months ago

    Congratulations!

  • Penny Fuller5 months ago

    This is lovely. Thank you for sharing it. It was a well-deserved win.

  • Caroline Jane5 months ago

    ❤ this is heart-warmingly beautiful. Congratulations. 🥰

  • D.K. Shepard5 months ago

    What a great word! Well done!

  • Congratulations on your win! This is such a sweet story!

  • Tressa Rose5 months ago

    Well deserved. Congratulations!

  • The Dani Writer5 months ago

    A LOT of depth and background packed into a small space. Congratulations on your win!

  • Cathy holmes5 months ago

    Congrats on the win. Well done.

  • Babs Iverson5 months ago

    Congratulations on the Win!!!

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