Distraction Game - it's all in the eyes
Originally published in the Poets community for the Dancing with Distraction Challenge, reworked for the Micro Heist Challenge.
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I cast a devilish smile from across the chaotic bar, towards you but not quite focused... enough to make you wonder if you are the target of my intentions tonight. Enough to give you hope.
In your direction now (you're sure) I wink, smile... and then I sashay, certainly toward you, it seems. Your heart pounds, then I turn aside just before I reach you and greet another hopeful, lonely soul instead. You watch as I place my hand in theirs, lean in close, and tacitly offer more.
As you sigh in sinking disappointment, I peek back over my shoulder, look you up and down, smirk, and bite my lip. Caught you looking again, or did you ever even look away? Don't lie. I know you didn't.
This will be easy, it's my favorite game and you are incapable of resisting. Just like they all are.
Of course, you never even noticed my friend, the forgettable one who bumped against you ever so gently while I held you in the gravity well of my eyes.
No matter, you'll figure it out when you go to close your tab after I disappear.
About the Creator
Donna Renee
Hi! Thanks for reading! My hobbies include making coffee, drinking coffee, and starting to write a story and then rage-deleting it when I get the slightest bit frustrated.
Work in Progress: WOWH, cozy mystery (paranormal elements)
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Easy to read and follow
Well-structured & engaging content
On-point and relevant
Writing reflected the title & theme
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Eye opening
Niche topic & fresh perspectives
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
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Zero grammar & spelling mistakes
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Comments (41)
Mz. D - Mizz U'z: fyi ~ Saw your Window-Eyes heading on someone elses story - hate when they do that to me. btw; Would really like to know if you relate to "Baby Mamas" Just 'j'
This is awesome. Really cleverly written
Congrats on TS! I don't know how I missed this, but this was great, an I love that you rewrote it to fit the micro heist. It's funny I wrote for the micro heist one similar to this (yours was better!!)! I love that!!!!
I'm catching up on some reading since I've been away for a bit. What a great story to come back to! Congrats on the top story! Both this and the original are great.
This was just as good as the original
Congratulations!
Congratulations, Donna!
We're still just so easy, even after you've pulled it on us once. Hope springs eternal. Chumps spring for nothing, though they might still try to find their wallet.
This is so well-written, I could envision the entire scene. A scandalous heist and a well-deserved top story! I will read the poem, too.
Oh, I love this version, Donna!! 😍😍 Brilliant; congrats on Top Story!! 🤗❤️❤️❤️
Love it! Both versions are brilliant! Congrats on Top Story!!
Beautiful. Congrats on your Top Story.
Ooh, nice rework! And congrats on the top story! 💖
Love the restructuring Donna, this was fun and maniacal. I love the narrative voice you chose, it really gave the story an interesting perspective! Overall a great read! Happy to congratulate you on another fabulous Top Story, love the roll you seem to be on!! 🎉
I loved this adaptation, a perfect rework!
Where’s my wallet?
Oh, those clever little minxes and their tactics! Great story, Donna and congratulations!
Excellent🫶🏽 I was engaged and captivated to the end. Keep writing ✍🏽
Excellent 💕& very engrossing writing ❤️
See, it did work! Worked so well, I get to congratulate you. Well done.
You had me from the first sentence. Loved it. Congrats on Top Story.
Congratulations on Top Story!
Congratulations on your excellent Top Story, well deserved
Congrats on Top Story - is the cover picture you from your pickpoketing days? lmao! Anyway, have a few donuts on the house - you deserve them for this gem!
I was sucked into the story from the first line. Amazing job and congratulations on top story!