You crashed into me
for the first time, forcefully,
and secretly I was afraid.
Yet, I did welcome you here after all.
You slashed me down the middle from navel to nose,
like plucking rows of matches and turning dust to smoke,
smudging black on the walls and leaving me like a piece of ash
broken off from the flame. Fluttering, slowly,
black in the night and landing, somewhere
in the wind,
Colorless.
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Comments (7)
A great one. I was waiting.
Woah this was really cool. I loved your descriptions and voice in this. Great poem!
Love the picture you painted with your words.
very profound and that's exactly what my ex wanted to do to me - and failed!
This was so poignant! Loved your poem!
Beautifully moving.
Impressive work! Well written!