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From Across The Room

By Babs IversonPublished 2 years ago β€’ Updated 2 years ago β€’ 1 min read
Youtube - Elvis Presley - Hawaiian Wedding Song from the film Blue Hawaii

Before you were mine,

Conch call was divine.

Attending the event,

happy to be present,

then, across the room

YOU next to the groom.

Your eyes met mine.

Providence design.

True LOVE at first sight,

amazing so right.

Swept us off our feet.

Our hearts' rhythmic beat.

Always together.

Sunny fairweather.

Volcanic eruption.

Without destruction,

subsides into bliss.

Stealing many a kiss.

True Love at first sight,

amazing so right.

Your eyes still hold mine.

Passed the test of time.

Island our treasure.

We will be forever.

Simply tenderness;

becomes effortless.

Above all adore,

again onshore.

True LOVE at first sight,

amazing so right.

Under island sun.

We are one.

Writer's notes: Mahalo! Aloha! This poem will be submitted to Vocal's challenge "from across the room" that will be judged by Kirun Kapur who teaches at Amherst College and serves as editor of the Beloit Poetry Journal.

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About the Creator

Babs Iverson

Barbara J Iversen, also known as Babs Iverson, lives in Texas and loves her grandkids to the moon and back. After writing one story, she found that writing has many benefits especially during a pandemic and a Texas-size Arctic Blast.

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  • Leslie Writes7 months ago

    Beautiful 😍

  • Mariann Carroll7 months ago

    Babs, I read it before. It’s a blessing to find such love . Thanks for sharing how you met your love ❀️

  • Previously hearted but now I can comment

  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    Beautiful piece. Previously hearted.

  • KJ Aartilaabout a year ago

    Love it! Love st first sight is the best! πŸ‘€ πŸ’•

  • Beautifully written!

  • Linda Rivenbarkabout a year ago

    Well done πŸ‘ Babs. I like it... hearted it, too.

  • Cendrine Marrouatabout a year ago

    Lovely poem, Babs! It has a nice, youthful vibe.

  • Denise E Lindquistabout a year ago

    I read it before when you posted for the contest and thought it was great. What wouldn't be great with Elvis at the top!πŸ’•

  • Colleen Millsteed about a year ago

    So beautiful my friend and I love the video.

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