Drift nets drag the waters
In their wake, only empty shells and
Skeletons of sailors
That used to brave these white-capped waves
Reefs of serenity are scarcer these days
Arthropods feast on what little remains
Ceaseless currents crash in all directions
The cephalopods claim my scattered wits for their collections
Insidious beasts dredge up bones from the depths
Oceans don’t belong in heads
No sleep until the sea is dead
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Comments (10)
The last few lines really delivered home. Love this!
And I understand your Vocal handle now... Perfect!
Every line of this packs a punch - vivid, creative and thought-provoking
Oh wow. This is intensely beautiful, Aphotic – deeply dark and achingly raw. Like an oceanic metaphor for writer's block. I don't know if that was your message but it's how this blocked up gal is interpreting it. Outstanding work. 🖤
You painted such a vivid picture, but kept a little mystery. So dark! I love it!
This was very dark, deep and dystopian. Oceans don't belong in heads, this line stood out to me the most! You did such a fantastic job with this challenge!
Oh my goodness, this is stunning in its darkness and depth. 🥹 I'm in awe. So many amazing lines in here; I can't pick what resonated the most because it all did. Wonderfully penned! This line was so amazing to me: "The cephalopods claim my scattered wits for their collections" 😍 I love your work so much!
Wow this is exquisite. Dark and intense and heavy. I love the alliteration sprinkled throughout.
This...is stunning! Lovely bit of sad darkness, but written so beauifully! Awesome!
Beautifully done. I love the imagery and rhythm