Twisted...
Thoughts at 2am. (Poppy's prompt).
2am. Sleep eluded, demons now infringing
broken, fractured and fragmented dreams impinging
on deeply yearning wishes vaunted, never granted
twisted, gnarled, my sins exposed, ghostlike, haunted
easing me into delusions of jaded jagged pieces
down to the depths of adagio's reaches~``
slowly plodding into larghetto's leisurely lento
horrors wrought, maundering slowly out the window
walking where Jesus walked, humility my sharpened sword
remonstrating the crowd unto sweet retro echoing reward
temptations like a wild goat comes wildly yearning
heartbeat's tantalizing anger yielding its spurning
swirling dry dusty wilderness swallowing me whole
seeds of the devil's flowers reach hungrily for my soul
abominable lies gnawing at my guts
throat parched, seeing only vile evil in dust
serving up dry throated hacks
the spitting up of sins being punished, forty whacks
Like Jesus in the wild wilderness forty days and nights
Meandering slowly, lips cracked, vainly pondering dark or light
No seeds to give birth to flowers
Just the devil sucking the succulence as cowards glower
Absolution, salvation, forgiveness for my sins
Hands held aloft, hoping bit-by-bit, my soul wins!!
Twisted and gnarled are the roots of my supplications
Hoping deep down, angels see not my evil intentions!!
2am. Blessed sleep soothes the demons
Freeing the real and frightening daemons!!!!!!!
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About the Creator
Novel Allen
Clouds come floating into my life, no longer to carry rain or usher storm, but to add color to my sunset sky. ~~ Rabindranath Tagore~~
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What if i don't wake up?
What if i don't wake up? Im feeling a little dizzy and decided to lay on bed yo sleep but as i close my eyes my mind runs wild, What if i don't wake up tomorrow? Here i said a little prayer asking for more days on this world. I have set a 6am alarm to start my day early, if i don't wake up i wonder how long is the alarm gonna ring?. I have promised my friend to go out with her tomorrow. I wonder how would she find out i didn't wake up and how would she react to it. Sad? Heartbroken? Possibly yes i know she'll be Heartbroken. I just talked to my mom and didn't say I LOVE HER my mind is rushing should I call her an tell her how much i love and appreciate her? No. I will stress her and she may not have a peaceful night but if i don't wake up how will she know all the greatness i want to tell her?. Can this mind of mine shut off already so i can sleep. But, if I don't wake up I'll never know what could've been of my life. That is sad. I wonder what will each person i know remember me with?will they remember My laugh? My smile? My voice? My presence, will my absence be felt? Something fun we did together? . Mostly I wonder what if i don't wake up tomorrow will they notice my absence at all? If i do. I'm gonna love them. I'm gonna show my love to them. And I'm gonna LIVE LIFE.
By Lindokuhle Mgwenyaabout 21 hours ago in Poets
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I love this. You are so incredibly talented, Novel!
This is a great Novel! It makes my approach to this prompt feel so juvenile. It truly moved me, thank you. Congratulations on Top Story you definitely deserve it.
What a wonderful top story. Congratulations
This isnβt just a poem, itβs a song. Congratulations on top story.
Phenomenal job my friend with lots of meaning ! Very many terrific lines but this stood out βseeds of the devil's flowers reach hungrily for my soul!β ππ
Congratulations on Top Story, this is very deep !!! π
Splendid work! Keep the momentumβcongrats!
Your wordsmithing is truly professional. Powerful stuff
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! ππππππ
You always give me something enjoyable to read, Novel. Your poem has a great combination of Biblical references and inclusion of aspects of music. Congratulations on Top Story!
Absolutely awesome!!! Love it!!!β€οΈβ€οΈπ Congratulations on Top Story too!!!
Simply magnificent! Congrats on your TOP STORY!
Excellent! It begs to be performed (& I hope you do). Congrats on TS!
Excellent use of language. Congrats on your very twisted Too Story!
Wow. This is incredible. Congrats on the TS.
Extremely vivid imagery! "Like Jesus in the wild wilderness forty days and nights Meandering slowly, lips cracked, vainly pondering dark or light... 2am. Blessed sleep soothes the demons Freeing the real and frightening daemons!!!!!!!"
This is so captivating! I read it like it was being dramatically performed. "broken, fractured and fragmented dreams impinging" was my favourite line. This poem was so well written.
Demonically weighty & filled with portents.
This brought to mind those classic paintings of night terrors where the imp crouches on the sleeper's chest, though it seems in the end you managed to throw the little bugger off! Well-wrought!
Like Sir Phillip Sydney's songs for Estelle-Sleep the poor man's wealth
Whoaaa, this was so dark and intense! You really didn't hold back at all and that made this so phenomenal!
Novel, the agony in the struggle... and this line: "No seeds to give birth to flowers"....broke me. and then the color of the two trees...gold and red. Each reader must decide what they mean to them.
Those sins exposed...great stuff.
This was so intense. Brilliantly done and loved the use of the 2am wakefulness and sleep. Like the moment ijust before.π€
I haven't had a crack at this yet. I can't hold a candle to the ones that have already gone up anyway! This is great π