It's a burden to carry your soul on your shoulders,
Whispering softly, it creeps back inside.
It's a burden to carry your soul on your shoulders,
Whispering softly, it eats you alive.
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From the inside out, I hear you screaming.
From the inside out, how much more can you take?
From the outside in, I see you bleeding.
From the outside in, keep the demons at bay.
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One more word, and I promise, I'll leave you.
Tell me the truth through the grin of your lies.
One more look, I'll admit that it's me too.
Read me the gospel; an unwelcome surprise.
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From the inside out, I hear you screaming.
From the inside out, how much more can you take?
From the outside in, I see you bleeding.
From the outside in, keep the demons at bay.
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Tiptoeing through paragraphs of ghostly figures, haunting the halls.
Wondering how one traverses through this room without devouring it all.
Echoes through the chamber, mocking snidely, they're recounting your sins.
Keeping track of every failure; breaking, carving from the marble within.
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From the inside out, I hear you screaming.
From the inside out, how much more can you take?
From the outside in, I see you bleeding.
From the outside in, keep the demons at bay.
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I 'wrote' this while driving back from the store this evening. I forgot my phone at home and there are no local radio stations that suit my fancy, so I started improvising my own song. This was the result. I kept repeating everything so I could write it all down by the time I got home. It's weird, and not like what I usually write, but felt like experimenting. Hoping to put it to music eventually, maybe, someday. For now, it's just a repetitive poem.
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Ashley Lima
I think about writing more than I write, but call myself a writer as opposed to a thinker.
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Interesting, haunting, and a little creepy (in the good way). A song sung by a scary presence as you try to get away...💙Anneliese
This is great the repetition works brilliant. Well done.
Oh woah, the story behind how you wrote this is great! I may just give that a go myself! Brilliant work! So heartfelt!
This is captivatingly excellent Ashley
That is actually very good, and an impressive accomplishment with that technique. In fact, that's how oral poetry was composed/memorized/and transmitted in all cultures before the invention of writing. The Illiad and Odyssey attributed to Homer are thought to have been in reality collectively composed by bards and memorized in chunks. As for the content, I feel the literary/horror aspect bleeding into the depressive side of what you seem to be going through, it's a creep under your skin, deep and sad kind of piece, and I really love what you've done with it. Sounds like a song already.
I never tried song lyrics and probably never will. Three cheers to you for successfully writing one.
This shows how inconveniences stimulate our creativity. But does this mean that in order to be creative, we should always feel uncomfortable?
Beautifully written and would be awesome with music for sure! I would love to hear it! 🤍
Forgot your phone at home? Nothing on the radio suits your fancy? No worries when you have Ashley! Yes, she can come up with a song in just mere minutes! And the best part is that you can add your own tune to it and sing along. Hurry and get your own Ashley now! Call 05 055 0555 now to order! Jokes aside, this was so raw, poignant and beautiful. I actually sang it to my own tune! Hope we get to listen to it once you add music!
That rhythm is WORKING. I love it! A dark subject, but certainly would be a good song.
I am such a fan of this repetition ✨👌 I smiled as soon as I recognised it… it works very very well! 👑💜✨
I'm glad you added context at the end of your poem, because the piece feels like a song. It would work well with music!
What a cool experiment! You were destined to leave your phone at home. Love the darkness - a great job! ☺️😊👏
This is great. I love it, Ash.
Fantastic! Very dark and wonderful!