The Girl With The 3rd Eye
360 View
I woke that morning
In a daze
Something was off
The world just a maze
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Difficult to get out of bed
I stumbled across the floor
Hitting my head
On the mirror
Hanging on the bathroom door
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I looked to see my image
Sheer terror struck
What was in that wine?
Was it vintage?
I tried to duck
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As it was not my face
In my reflection
But rather the back of my head
With all my hair
Over the section
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I looked back at my mane
And pulled the strands
To see
Another eye looking
Back at me
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I spun around to see my face
My nose, ears and two eyes
Where they should be
Yet a sense of doom
I could still see
The rest of the room
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I spun around same as before
I pulled my hair back
“Shut the front door!”
As the third eye was there
Looking at me in fear
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Voices in the next room
Family starting to awaken
I covered my extra vision
To not leave them shaken
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I got ready for work
And tried to assert
That things would be okay
Sporting a hoodie
On a hot summer day
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At my office
I sat in wonder
What did I do?
To now have more than two
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Then I began to ponder
Could this be a gift?
Something that would uplift?
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Out of the office
I strode!
Let down the hoodie
And watched my coworkers
Explode!
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As I parted my hair
In the back
Colleagues behind me looked like
They would have
A heart attack
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“Yes!” I proclaimed
To the stares all around
“I now have a third eye!
Forget The Girl With The Dragon Tattoo
I can see you and you
And you behind me too!”
My 360 view
Was pretty cool
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Except for the buzzing
What was that sound
I woke to turn around
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Hitting the alarm
I felt my head
Just hair and nothing more
I began to frown
The Girl With The 3rd Eye
Was now in my folklore.
About the Creator
C. H. Richard
My passion is and has always been writing. I am particularly drawn to writing fiction that has relatable storylines which hopefully keep readers engaged
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Comments (29)
This narrative is so engaging and the internal conflict the character experiences is well-represented. The use of imagery and metaphors, such as the metaphor of the "maze" to describe the world, adds depth to this piece. Overall, this is a thought-provoking and entertaining piece of poetry. Bravo!
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Wow, I can't believe I somehow missed this one! Huge congrats on Top Story! I really love the concept of the third eye, and super enjoyed how you brought us through the entire experience! Very vivid and detailed; I felt like I was there with you. I love that last line as well! Wonderful job with this! 🥰
Interesting dream! Do you ever try to interpret dreams?
Spooky read it really hooked me in to read on. Well done.
This is awesome! I could picture the whole scenario!
Congratulations on the top story!!! A third eye freaks me out. What a dream!!! 😵
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I like this because it reminds me of a Japanese folktale where a man married a beautiful woman who never ate. Then one day he and the villagers figured out why. She had a mouth on the back of her head that was covered by her long hair.
Beautifully written!
This is definitely dreamlike! Great read!!
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This is so good! Great rhythm and it flowed so well! Congratulations on the well-deserved Top Story!
I love the rhythm and light hearted tone of this poem. Such fun to be carried through this!
What a fun perspective. I loved this
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Ahhhh!!! Amazing 🤩 I loved this it was like a cool scene from a movie!!! Congratulations on your top story
I already loved this but Congrats on the Top Story!!
*Goosebumps* Great poem!
Congrats, very well deserved.
Creepy! Congrats on your Top Story!
Congratulations on your Top Story
A very compelling poem!
Really neat how wrote this. Hearted.