The first Wonder of this World
A rhyming poem for the "Extraterrestrial" challenge
When the alien craft alighted
I did not stop to question.
I opened up my home to them,
I did not fear ingestion.
Though just one little chap emerged,
Long armed, with wide midsection,
I welcomed him with open arms,
And offered warm reception.
I was keen that he should recognise,
With my astute direction,
The best of all the things on earth,
And he gave no objection.
The bathroom was our first big stop,
I showed him my reflection,
“These eyes”, I said “Are just spot on,
Because I am perfection!
The lens inside, it has such strength,
That use for far inspection,
Requires wearing spectacles,
Some call it sight correction.”
He looked at me with one pink eye.
I took it as suggestion,
So on I went with lesson two,
“Desirable complexion”.
“My skin” I said, and moved his hand
For maximum sensation,
“Is lined to show how it can move!
Again, I am perfection!”
His skin was soft, I have to say,
And seemed, to my perception,
Quite lovely, like a rabbit’s ear,
Seems churlish not to mention.
Although his nose did not align
To humanoid convention,
“Cute” had clearly played a role
In natural selection.
My nose was large, as I announced,
With hairs in each direction,
“These nostril hairs” I told with pride,
“Help me ward off infection”.
We moved next to view my chin,
Whose natural inclination
To disappear into my neck
Assists in introspection.
Then I stripped bare and showed to him
My muscles in contraction.
“These bumps are signs of peace”, I said,
“And gentle interaction!
These loose skinned hands I show you now,
Are tools of great connection,
You’ll see they’re worn, from all the use,
Because I am perfection.”
I showed him how my nipples neared
My navel’s proud distention,
“A sign”, I said, “of wisdom’s growth,
And thoughtful inclination.”
Then at my flaccid arms we looked,
“These let me show affection,
By holding you with these I say,
‘You too are just perfection!’”
The tour was closed, and he returned
To his airborne invention.
I marvelled as I watched him go
At my advanced detection.
For I could see the alien race
Was, based on my inspection,
Quite perfect in most every way,
Beyond my expectation!
Then just when I had made a snack,
There came in my direction,
Six more beings from the craft,
A hideous collection!
Some tall, some thin, rough skin, five eyes,
Without an invitation,
They came into my living room,
Began a genuflection!
And I forgave my little friend
His act of misdirection,
And we agreed, from that day on,
We all can be perfection.
Comments (9)
amazing! 💗💝
Oooo, this was sooooo amazing! I loved the ending so much!
Sweet poem. Wouldn’t have thought of the bathroom first. ROFL.
Such deep thought and lesson in life. I love how you mixed humour and insight, it was….perfection. Congratulations
I doff my hat. Well done!
Quite the tale! I loved the repetition of sound in the rhyme scheme, not as easy to pull off as one would think. Well done!
This was so unusual and such an interesting read! I really loved the part where you took him to the mirror and the lines around the eyes… this was very beautiful ☺️ 🤍🕊️✨
You win! 🏆
Wow...standing ovation for this one, Hannah! Love the thoughts behind it and your wonderful wordplay. Great great great entry!