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teeth

an act of mercy

By Trinity HPublished 5 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - January 2024
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Can you feel it?

Like thousands of ants running down your skin

Like hot oil pushing through your veins

Like swallowing concrete

Can you feel it?

An elevator drop

Spotty vision

Clenched fists

Can you feel it?

I'm screaming for fairness, for mercy, for peace and comfort and rightness

But I'm sitting on the floor counting the lines of the tile

Stealing anger from tomorrow

Can you feel it? My anger?

Lay your hand on me and flinch from the heat

Watch as I watch as you watch me

A lion behind a cage

You are not the one who locked me here

But if the metal bars shift and offer me lenience

My teeth will not care who's neck I bite into

surreal poetryStream of ConsciousnessCONTENT WARNING
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Trinity H

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  • Anna 4 months ago

    Congrats on Top Story!🥳

  • Novel Allen5 months ago

    Nope, I don't need the concrete, I got enough of it already. This is so intense, I actually feel the concrete tightening. Great descriptive writing, Congrats.

  • sleepy drafts5 months ago

    Wow! This is everything. Beautifully done. Congratulations on Top Story!

  • A. Lenae5 months ago

    I felt empathy and tingly worriedness while reading this, and then there was like a buzzing type of righteous rage when consuming from bottom to top. This entire piece has teeth, and your voice is electric. So good!

  • Kenny Penn5 months ago

    Chilling and oh so enjoyable. Great poem and congrats on TS, Trinity.

  • Ken Douglas5 months ago

    Your poetry is interesting. Buy I love this guy's poetry 👇 https://www.facebook.com/100010296994439/posts/2183692751983937/?mibextid=rS40aB7S9Ucbxw6v I found it on Facebook and it was worth my time!.

  • Test5 months ago

    Outstanding! Keep striving for greatness—congratulations!

  • Naomi Gold5 months ago

    Yes, I feel it! Righteous anger. All positive changes come from someone who has simply been pushed too far and had enough. Love this for you. 🩷

  • JBaz5 months ago

    Backwards , forwards sideways, it doesn’t matter, it is brilliant anyway it is read. Congratulations

  • Caroline Jane5 months ago

    Oh yeah. Felt it. Visceral.

  • Rachel Deeming5 months ago

    This hit me hard, with its anger and suppressed savagery being forced into being.

  • Toby Heward5 months ago

    Great stories

  • Emma Kate Coleman5 months ago

    Wowza. So gritty! Well done. 👏

  • Suze Kay5 months ago

    This is really moving. Was it written for the inverse challenge? If not, you should absolutely submit it! It is such a little mind warp of a poem. Phenomenal writing!

  • Catsidhe5 months ago

    Beautiful and deeply affecting!

  • Fly Alone5 months ago

    Painfully written: A lion behind a cage You are not the one who locked me here But if the metal bars shift and offer me lenience My teeth will not care who's neck I bite into :😔

  • Natasha Collazo5 months ago

    Oof. I felt the rage. 👏

  • Cathy holmes5 months ago

    excellent piece. Congrats on the TS

  • Margaret Brennan5 months ago

    congratulations on TS. very well deserved. your poem is so true.

  • Christiane Winter5 months ago

    Incredibly poignant, i've read this no less than 4 times, and every time I do, it hits a little harder. Congratulations on TS!

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