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Can you feel it?
Like thousands of ants running down your skin
Like hot oil pushing through your veins
Like swallowing concrete
Can you feel it?
An elevator drop
Spotty vision
Clenched fists
Can you feel it?
I'm screaming for fairness, for mercy, for peace and comfort and rightness
But I'm sitting on the floor counting the lines of the tile
Stealing anger from tomorrow
Can you feel it? My anger?
Lay your hand on me and flinch from the heat
Watch as I watch as you watch me
A lion behind a cage
You are not the one who locked me here
But if the metal bars shift and offer me lenience
My teeth will not care who's neck I bite into
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Comments (21)
Congrats on Top Story!🥳
Nope, I don't need the concrete, I got enough of it already. This is so intense, I actually feel the concrete tightening. Great descriptive writing, Congrats.
Wow! This is everything. Beautifully done. Congratulations on Top Story!
I felt empathy and tingly worriedness while reading this, and then there was like a buzzing type of righteous rage when consuming from bottom to top. This entire piece has teeth, and your voice is electric. So good!
Chilling and oh so enjoyable. Great poem and congrats on TS, Trinity.
Your poetry is interesting. Buy I love this guy's poetry 👇 https://www.facebook.com/100010296994439/posts/2183692751983937/?mibextid=rS40aB7S9Ucbxw6v I found it on Facebook and it was worth my time!.
Outstanding! Keep striving for greatness—congratulations!
Yes, I feel it! Righteous anger. All positive changes come from someone who has simply been pushed too far and had enough. Love this for you. 🩷
Backwards , forwards sideways, it doesn’t matter, it is brilliant anyway it is read. Congratulations
Oh yeah. Felt it. Visceral.
This hit me hard, with its anger and suppressed savagery being forced into being.
Great stories
Wowza. So gritty! Well done. 👏
This is really moving. Was it written for the inverse challenge? If not, you should absolutely submit it! It is such a little mind warp of a poem. Phenomenal writing!
Beautiful and deeply affecting!
Painfully written: A lion behind a cage You are not the one who locked me here But if the metal bars shift and offer me lenience My teeth will not care who's neck I bite into :😔
Oof. I felt the rage. 👏
excellent piece. Congrats on the TS
congratulations on TS. very well deserved. your poem is so true.
Incredibly poignant, i've read this no less than 4 times, and every time I do, it hits a little harder. Congratulations on TS!
Wow. I feel that