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Sad poetry

By Bonnie BowermanPublished 2 months ago Updated 2 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - February 2024
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Subway
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Silent faces stare at a mumbled drunk’s despair

He stumbles, and falls, hurt, weeping now, in hoarse, shuttering sobs - why should they care

Sprawled on the platform, moaning, he rocks back and forth, cradling his head

With grimy fingers, he wipes at his tears and his chin where it bled

Treated as unimportant as an empty coffee cup – he is in a crowd - but alone

No one lifts a finger, they prefer to use them, to scroll down their phones

He starts to curse and swear - they edge, farther away, still

Unwilling to even bear witness – why bother – this is a big city - that is the drill

Deaf to the words of a beaten man’s pain

Godlike, they stand, impatiently, waiting for the train

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Bonnie Bowerman

Just a curious soul with a crayon, at the beginning of my writing journey. There were many absorbing detours along the way.

I am so happy, I stumbled upon this community. The depth of talent here, takes my breath away!

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  • D.K. Shepard2 months ago

    Gripping, gutting, and gorgeously written

  • John Cox2 months ago

    Powerful, powerful writing. This is a deeply moving and tragic indictment. Very well done!

  • Anna 2 months ago

    Congrats on Top Story!!

  • A. Lenae2 months ago

    As this continues, the pain of this reality grew heavier and heavier, but when you described the crowd as "godlike" - well that was such a distinct jab and it really stuck the landing in such a masterful way. Your message is so uncomfortable in its truth, and you depicted it with care and intention with next-level skill. Thank you for writing this. I plan to share it with people in my life regarding the stripped humanity that surrounds our current conversations about homelessness.

  • Phil Flannery2 months ago

    Sad but true.

  • Safa Jama2 months ago

    Great going! Keep up the fantastic effort—congratulations!

  • Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • sleepy drafts2 months ago

    Oh, gosh, Bonnie. Thank you so much for writing this. So many people turn a blind eye. Congratulations on Top Story. This was beautifully and powerfully done. 💗

  • Ashley Shiflett2 months ago

    Very gutrenching. A wonderfully written piece. Congrats on top story!

  • Test2 months ago

    Exceptional work! Keep up the remarkable progress—congratulations!

  • Gabriel Huizenga2 months ago

    Powerful, powerful piece right here. How blind we can be to the suffering of others- thank you for sharing this beautiful and tragic poem. You've got a new subscriber, congrats on the Top Story!

  • Test2 months ago

    Wow. Incredible. Congratulations on TS.

  • Cathy holmes2 months ago

    This is so sad, and such an unfortunate reality. Well done and congrats on the TS.

  • This is a very interesting piece. The implication that this is everywhere in the city is both sad and relevant. Great poem and congrats on the Top Story!

  • My heart broke so much for him 🥺 As much as it makes me sad that no one even asked him what's wrong, I don't blame them either. There's just so much of scammers and it's always better to be safe than sorry. But in the context of this poem, I know that he's definitely not a scammer.

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