Rainy Day in the Car
Why did it bring so much comfort?
Heavy rain
Parked car
No umbrella
Dinner date cancelled
You looked at me
From behind the wheel
I smiled
Your worry dissipated
Like cotton candy in water
Silence ensued
Tranquil and serene
We watched the raindrops
Racing down the windshield
Our fingers intertwined
Conversation bloomed
From feathers
To oceans
We talked about everything
You, me, and us
Our future
All worries were rainwashed
It was us against the world
You, my Sun
I, your Moon
Our future, the Earth
Hours passed
Rain subsided
Jokes started
Playful tugs
Gentle punches
World-forgetting laughter
Rain stopped
We got out
Couldn't stop smiling
A rainy day in the car with you
Brought so much comfort
Why?
Because it was with you
And it will always be you
I wished for you
For the rest of my life
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This is such a sweet, beautiful poem… ‘Silence ensued Tranquil and serene We watched the raindrops Racing down the windshield Our fingers intertwined Conversation bloomed’… The simple moments in life are often the best.🤩
It's beautiful! I love it!
I'm lucky enough to have someone that elicits these feelings for me. For the longest time, I thought that I couldn't fall in love, that I was too emotionally numb for that, but as it turns out, I just had to wait for an amazing Raven. You are such an amazing writer, My Morbid Friend.
This is such a great piece, one of your classics in my opinion! I love the authenticity of it and relatability of it! Felt like a scene from a movie and was beautifully executed with your imagery! Great work D!
This is so beautiful
I love this 💞
This is lovely and beautiful!
Dharr, That was truly beautiful. I pictured the scene, smelled the rain felt the love. so good.
Such a beautiful and intimate poem! Wonderful and evocative 💙Anneliese
Oh this unlocked a memory I didn’t realize I had, I could feel this poem!! 🥹
The imagery gets me in this poem... it pulls me in and places me in the car! I love the way your descriptive language plays on my senses and just brings me this sense of peace, this sense of home. So beautifully written!
Loved this!
Brings you right to the moments of serenity. Sitting in a car and talking while it is raining is so special ❤️ Love it
Wow, this was magical! If there’s two things I love, it’s rain and moments of intimacy with another person. You combined them, and your use of language is superb here as always.
This was beautiful Dharrsheena! I'm in love with your imagery and use of simile! My favourites were the cotton candy melting in water and the sun and moon reference! 💜
Wow beautiful poem! I wish for the same! 😀
Another beautiful one. You have a gift! I really enjoyed this one, it felt very real.
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Just love this so much
Beautiful imagery, I loved this! So many powerful lines!
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I love this. It was such a beautiful adventure! I subscribed!
This was so amazing! So many lines I loved here. This is one: "Like cotton candy in water" and here is another "Conversation bloomed From feathers To oceans" Just GORGEOUS; a great poem, so many emotions!
So sweet! You really captured love in this
Wonderful- this made me reminisce on my experiences like this- thank you for sharing!