Presence Converted
to thought...
By Kristen BalyeatPublished about a year ago • Updated about a year ago • 1 min read
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Photo by Derek Owens on Unsplash
what is this?
i see it
it is new
i smell it
it is in my hands
it is what i am doing
it is fun
it is in my mouth
it is on my face
it lights up my brain
it makes me feel
it is now
it is texture
it is flavor
it waters my mouth
i enjoy this
it is wonderful
it is happiness
it is…experi–
"It’s a plum."
oh. i guess this is Plum.
About the Creator
Kristen Balyeat
Words fly to me on the wind, bump into me as I'm strolling the city, splash me in the face while I rest by the river, and shake me awake in the middle of the night– I’m humbly one of the many vessels they use to come to life.
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Dear Ms. Kristen - As I always scroll through your presentations to see what I may have missed - This one really caught my eye and I wanted to share this with you: Terrilynn (my featured artist and bff that you may have noticed on many of my articles) and I have an identical as yours - Olivia 'Finger' paints all over her 'Face' Thanks for popping out special memories Jay
😁 ❤️
The infinite wonder & beauty of each new childhood discovery, moderated by parental commentary.
So sweet! 💞
Very sweet ❤️ They always do have that look when trying something new ❤️
The passage appears to be a description of someone experiencing a plum for the first time. The author describes using their senses to explore and enjoy the fruit, including seeing it, smelling it, holding it, and tasting it. They express their pleasure and excitement at the experience and suggest that the fruit brings them happiness and joy. The passage highlights the sensory and emotional aspects of experiencing new things and finding pleasure in the simple things in life. The abrupt ending with the statement, "Oh. I guess this is Plum," adds a touch of humor to the piece.
Awesome! And you found the perfect picture on Unsplash. (Or did you write to the picture? That would be a good idea.) That was literally sweet and fun Kristen! [Alas, there's no plum emoji, but it would probably mean something dirty anyway...] 😀
So cute!💖
🤣 this finish is hysterical! love this piece, Kristen. (i mean this next bit VERY SUBTLY) ... in a way, we could also look at this moment as a first step out of the land of Spiritual Wonder and into a land of the mundane and concrete (the land of the "known"). But still, we do have to be able to speak about things to one another in order to coordinate/survive so... *'weighs' hands up and down like scales of justice* guess it's a balance, isn't it?
Beautiful Piece ❤️😉made me smile -it's a plum❗
hahahah! I love this so much, Kristen!! My oldest dyed himself (hair and skin lol) with beets a few times and I imagine this is exactly what his mind went through! 🥰🥰
I love the descriptions you had in there.. the curiousity and wonder... And then how the curiousity immediately disappeared as soon as the answer was given 🤣🤣.. kids have such short attention spans 😅
Ohh this made me smile and wish my kids hadn’t grown up so fast
Really enjoyed. I wonder what 'pickle' sounds like?
This one might be my favourite 😁
Oh! This was so sweet and fun to read. 😊 I love the journey through the child's thoughts as the senses are activated in brand-new ways. 🤗 Wonderful work!
Oh, I loved the innocence and curiosity you evoked with this one, Kristen! And loved the switch from experience to plum. Made me smile a lot! Clever to keep it nice and simple and only a few words per line too! Bravo!
Wow, this is such a great perspective and a really clever approach. You covered the learning experience perfectly. Really well done, Kristen!