Not Quite Right
Villanelle Poem
UPDATE: This is not a Villanelle, as you will swiftly realise. It took me some research to understand the correct structure...
They see this world is not quite right
It is bruised and broken and filled with grey-tinged ash
Billowing and building until the days shift into night
They say this world is not quite right
Blaming devils and women and fruit from Edens’ stash
A story from a storybook, written to illicit fright
They warn this world is not quite right
It's growing warm, and crowded and so full of trash
Humanity the birthplace of its very own plight
They beg this world is not quite right
Taking blade to limb to slash and slash
The leaves of a tree spreading its blight
They cry this world is not quite right
Our planet is a vehicle, we’re certain will crash
Too late, they whimper, too late to fight
They know, this world is not quite right
We did this, eyes open, straight forward we dash
We burn and blister and crumble in our light
Yet choose to go willingly, into that poisoned night.
About the Creator
Obsidian Words
Fathomless is the mind full of stories.
Reader insights
Nice work
Very well written. Keep up the good work!
Top insight
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Comments (3)
Great job
Awww, what a wonderful! I loved it!
This is so confronting and haunting I love it!!