Morning Mist
Awakening in the Forest
The shrouded, silent meadow greets the day,
Wrapped in precious moisture, drinking deep.
Muted, muffled notes of birdsong play
As woodland creatures rise from sheltered sleep.
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Overhead burns brilliant, molten gold
As early sunlight scatters through the mist,
Encouraging the new day to unfold
For morning comes, and lips wait to be kissed.
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From hidden perches high and hollows low
A thousand pairs of eyes take in the sight
Of you and I, awakened by the glow
And as we stir, two thousand wings take flight.
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Entangled, on the forest floor we lie,
'Til with a kiss, into the mist we fly.
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Well, this one EVOLVED. I started writing a tautogram based on this photo and I didn't really like the way it was going. I decided I'd take a whack at a Shakespearean sonnet. So, I started writing a nature poem, then it turned into a fantasy poem, and then, somehow, it became a fantasy love poem. *** In retrospect, I suppose it doesn't ask a question, as a good sonnet should, but I think the final couplet can be interpreted as an answer to an unasked one. I think. I hope. I dunno. ***
I hope you enjoy it!
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Dana Crandell
Dad, Stedpad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.
Poet, Writer, Editor, Photographer, Artist and Tech/Internet nerd. Content writer by trade. Vocal Creator by choice.
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I like that you just let this poem turn into whatever it was turning into. It was a great poem, just as you let it mature. I felt like I was there, very atmospheric. Great job!
This flows! So mellifluous 💕🙂
Immersive and beautifully written. Rich imagery. Lovely accompanying photo!
Wow, Dana, this is beautiful! I'm so glad you followed your instincts on this one and allowed it to develop into this masterpiece! You painted a very romantic scene- between two beings and nature. Such a beautiful piece!
I don't know how to interpret this--human, animals or birds on the awakening on the forest floor & then disappearing into the morning mist? 2 lovers afraid of being discovered & so they fly off before the mist disappears? It could be about any 2 creatures. I think.
I’ve not read many sonnets (only a few Shakespeare ones) but I loved the images and rhythm of yours. Great Job! 😊👍
This turned out perfectly, and I love the photo.
Lol, I love how your poem evolved both in format and genre! Beautifully written!
Just look at how lovely this turned out! You let go and voilã, masterpiece. Nice job. I love the feel of this one. It’s grounded enough that somehow it sounds fresh but ancient at the same time, just like magic. ✨
This is beautiful, Dana. Well done.
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Love this!!! It passes as a Shakespearen Sonnet. So it has an extra syllable. Very Elizabethan!!!💖💖💕
This is a beautiful poem! Your words beautifully capture the essence of the morning mist and the awakening of the forest. The way you described the woodland creatures and their songs is just mesmerizing. And the way you incorporated fantasy elements into the poem is really captivating. Overall, it's a wonderful piece of art. Thank you for sharing it with us!