This is out of the blue, I know. I know.
I get some rosé. You look at the menu like you want a new fix. You go for a dry red. Same old you.
I feel you. The soft grin and lazy gaze on my lips. A warm hand at my back. Love.
How long has it been? I am in the area.
We sat down then, at our spot in the back. All I wish and want is for time to slow to a halt.
You took a look at my palm, face up, in your grip.
That lazy grin is back. You show my love line. It goes all the way over here. Tap, tap. All the way to you. Must be fate, huh?
I look at that line now.
At our spot. If you are free, give me a bell.
I know. I know. You are long gone. I can just cast out my net once more. So many fish.
Be nice to see you.
But I just want you to know.
I will be here, in the back.
About the Creator
Jane
I spend 99% of my time day-dreaming about fantasy worlds.
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Comments (21)
This composition resonates with the complexity of contemporary love and grief, and it masterfully expresses the bittersweet spirit of desire and nostalgia in relationships, in my opinion.
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nice
Very creative Amber and an enjoyable read.
Ouch. 💔 I think it hurts so much more when you’re still holding onto hope that it can be like old times again. It never can, not even for a moment. The way you weaved memories with one-sided texts is such a poignant portrayal of modern love and heartbreak.
Awwww. Lovely. Beautiful.
Wow, just WOW! that sounds like somewhere I've been and perhaps, might be once again. Brought to mind so many memories.
that sudden wave of sadness caught me off guard.....loved it!
Oof, that hit me hard. Oh well, life has to go on. Loved your poem! Congratulations on your Top Story! I've subscribed to you!
I liked your poem.
This is so heartfelt and evocative, well done!
The malaise of the modern dating world. So well written 💕
Oh yay, well done on Top Story - excited for you Amber Jane!
Lovely...I think you got the storm of our natures down here... Top Story, indeed...
Great poem - a real story
Well that broke my heart. I got the feeling that the person the narrator is talking about is dead, though maybe just gone their separate way. Poetry isn't my forte but I just want to say thanks :)
Beautifully written. Congrats on the TS.
This is great! Congrats on the top story
This is brilliant, seamlessly composed. I found my way here via recommendation in lift your voice today, and it was a good one!
I am so glad Mackenzie shared this on Raise Your Voice this week. This is incredible. I love your formatting on this and the way the italicised lines fill in the gaps a little and that last line is beautiful if oh so tragic! instant subscription, well done Amber!
The weaving together of time, if that is what is happening here, is marvelous to behold. I adore the italicized lines evoking the memories of past dates in the relationship. Though not explicitly stated, the heartbreak comes thru without question. Truly well done. 💜👏