Learn Your Job & Learn It Well
It might just save Your life.
A tsunami rolls
My dad's on a ship, now flipped
Summer's cruelty
***
Water cools engines,
but now they're sucking in air
Dried, like Autumn leaves
***
Overheating pipes
Could cause a fire's explosion
Dad's cool as winter
***
He learned the ship's pipes
The engine receives coolant
He came home in Spring
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I felt your dad's courageous trip all the way through - I'm so glad he's ok! I felt the furry of the elements but your dad's cool composure. Very well done, Thavien!
Wow. This is really well done, and I love the happy ending.
I'm so glad Dad is okay! Loved this story Haiku! I was so worried at first but was so glad for the happy ending!
This was a great read.
I love how you tied the elements and the seasons into this wonderful story-like series of haiku. Amazing work on this!!