In This Hour
"Go as far as you can see ..." - Thomas Carlyle
I
The way your hair falls
like dark rain over your eyes
I've been dry too long
II
What do I want more --
to rest, my back to your back,
or to roll over ...?
III
Up late with my dad,
I play a card, quip, chat, feel
your hand on my back.
IV
I've felt pain--deep cut,
bad fall--but you hurt
me. Me. Not at all the same.
V
In my wash I find
your lone grey sock. No
mate to hear me weep.
VI
We talk and talk, then
let holy hush fall
with the rise of a rose sun.
VII
I'm an ugly mess this day
You don't say a word
It's the most kind lie
VIII
By my cup, I find
one rose, and a note:
Love, this is how I see you
IX
As you bend to weed
I ogle your butt. You turn,
grin, blow me a kiss.
X
Eyes on book, you set
your tea cup too near the edge
and I pull it back.
XI
Tea gets cold. Sun sets.
I sit by your side
and hold your hand in the dark.
XII
The morn may come, love,
when your eyes can see
only your side of the veil
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Sonia Heidi Unruh
I love: my husband and children; all who claim me as family or friend; the first bite of chocolate; the last blue before sunset; solving puzzles; stroking cats; finding myself by writing; losing myself in reading; the Creator who is love.
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Comments (11)
Very lovely, very real. Excellent verses.
"In my wash I find your lone grey sock. No mate to hear me weep." Among so many stunning haikus here, this one is the one I had to quote and praise. The emotion in such a short little poem is substantial and startling to me. I think the most amazing thing about this poem is that each haiku really does stand on its own. What an incredible feat of poetry, this. Truly fantastic work, Sonia. I truly truly hope this one places. 💗😵
Amazing poem in form and content, a progression of thoughts both simple and profound. So elegant and beautiful. 💙Anneliese
Sonia, this was so beautiful! It was heartfelt and very elegantly written! 💕
Everyday love, with a breath-takingly sober finish.
Beautiful 💕💕💕
This is beautiful. Especially the details. I feel the same way about my mate 💖
I love the look of this. It’s artful. Those last three lines 🤍
Very clever! Loved what you did here. Great job.
Wow, that was incredible. Loved that last set of lines. Really great work :)
What a wonderful story told over twelve sets of Haikus! I loved this so much!