Heartbreak as Eclipse
On My Behalf
Entreat the star for darkness, please (oh please); I am
craving candlelight but everyone wants the sun and its warmth.
Leave it off. This migraine is the weight of a million lightyears
interwoven now with who I am (and wish to be). I am begging,
please, for you to entreat the star for darkness, for twilight, for cover.
Search the sky for some great body of shade, if only for a minute, to
engulf me in crescent-shaped pain that I can put in a box [and smile].
About the Creator
Mackenzie Davis
“When you are describing a shape, or sound, or tint, don’t state the matter plainly, but put it in a hint. And learn to look at all things with a sort of mental squint.” Lewis Carroll
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Comments (14)
Wow Mackenzie... this felt kind of heavy but also relatable! That feeling when you just want some peace but have other obligations, comes to mind for me. Great piece here!!
“ I am craving candlelight but everyone wants the sun and its warmth.” Those are such masterful, powerful lines. I’ve really really missed your writing!! This was incredible and that ending was especially impactful!
Truly missed your writing, Mackenzie. This one was breathtakingly beautiful in imagery and emotion
This poem was just beautiful, Mackenzie! I especially loved the line "engulf me in crescent-shaped pain that I can put in a box and smile." It's that use of smile that really sticks with me. I know all too well how it feels to put pain in a box, no matter its shape and smile through another day. Hope you're doing well and thank you for the wonderful poem!
Beautiful longing for softness, a quiet pain that we need to embrace in heartache, when we’re not ready to face well-meaning jazz hands. ‘ engulf me in crescent-shaped pain’ was just a gorgeous if sad image. I thought of how a body bends into a crescent when in pain 💕
Magnificent...hope you're not feeling too bad though! This is stunning!
I really like this one, and the yearning for quiet and softness. Sometimes light can be far too harsh, and we just want “darkness, for twilight, for cover”. The triple caught my eye as I read, and the contrasting of candles vs the sun is clever, as opposed to simply light and dark🤗
This was so poignantly beautiful! Loved your Acrostic!
Spot on. Literally and figuratively I guess!
Magnificent, especially that last line. And that picture-- so mysterious-- how did you find that??
☺️👏
Well written!
Well written! Good job!
Mackenzie I love the pleading for softness