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a grocery list poem

By Mackenzie DavisPublished 7 months ago 1 min read
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Photo Credit: Riik@mctr on Flickr

June 03 (8:17 PM)

rotisserie chicken (2)                     

broccolini (2 bunches)

romaine hearts (2)

kombucha & kolsch ❤️

           

sunflower seeds (unsalted)

breadcrumbs 🦆

                  

               

September 15 (9:31 AM)

chicken breast

bone broth

it. parsley

rosemary & thyme (f)

carrots, celery

barley

elbow pasta

            

red grapes, watermelon, pears

              

crème fraiche + dark chocolate

             

peasant loaf

butter (salted)

           

Hefeweizen

raspberry leaf tea

                   

(1 friend

1 sibling?)

           

           

December 25 26 27 (4:22 PM)

my two front teeth                

oranges

apple cider

brandy

cardamom pods, star anise, cloves

vanilla ext. 

one little thing, a ring xD  

snickerdoodles!

chocolate truffles          

meat & potatoes  

            

[you] ?

            

                

March 27 (11:47 PM)

all the expensive crap

donuts

donuts

3 blank cards

               

             

March 28 (2:25 PM)

crumbs

pond scum

          

sad poetrylist
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About the Creator

Mackenzie Davis

“When you are describing a shape, or sound, or tint, don’t state the matter plainly, but put it in a hint. And learn to look at all things with a sort of mental squint.” Lewis Carroll

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Copyright Mackenzie Davis.

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  • Mike Singleton - Mikeydred7 months ago

    Interesting concept well excuted

  • Teresa Renton7 months ago

    Very well done 👏 I absolutely love the less is more approach. This poem could equally be a hc flash. So many emotions packed into this. It went from hope and excited anticipation, to sadness and hurt. The interplay of ingredients—some decadent and ‘special occasion’ showy, some comforting self-indulgent treats to cheer you up, and some just simply ordinary ‘everyday’ necessities; almost as if the writer longs for the intimacy with the ‘you’, that sharing the quotidian ‘meat and potatoes’ of life brings. But the crossed out dates, and words, suggest a repetitive state of being let down by this ‘friend’, this ‘you’? So heartbreaking 💔 The breadcrumbs to pond scum trajectory is brilliantly clever! This is what I gleaned from your piece. Apologies if I totally misinterpreted, but I loved it! 🥰

  • Babs Iverson7 months ago

    Superb list!!!💕❤️❤️

  • Maureen Y. Palmer7 months ago

    This is so interesting!!

  • Grz Colm7 months ago

    Feels a bit voyeurisric!! Nice list! Amazing how we can get characterisation from this. 😁

  • E.K. Daniels7 months ago

    What a clever poem! A unique structure which evoked emotions even with someone as simple as a list. Well done!

  • That's a long break between shopping lists. Must have a great garden, lol. (I'm assuming you got the ring.)

  • Kristen Balyeat7 months ago

    This is brilliant! The lists created an entire scene for me. Wonderful job, Mackenzie! 💫💞

  • My two front teeth. Not me thinking about domestic abuse. Your poem was so sad!

  • Cathy holmes7 months ago

    This is fascinating. Parts made me laugh (two front teeth), parts made me sad (you?). I'm thinking about this one, knowing my wouldn't be nearly as "healthy."

  • Alexander McEvoy7 months ago

    This filled me with a deep sense of melancholy I don’t fully comprehend. The line [you?] was extremely tragic. well done Mackenzie!

  • Lamar Wiggins7 months ago

    Pond scum took me out, lol. This almost felt like a person that uses shopping as a distraction from other things going on in their life. Well done!

  • Mesh Toraskar7 months ago

    This is so 'writer who adores fall, craves companionship, but would rather chat with squirrels than attend a social event' coded. Reading this felt like all the seasons you cycled through. I felt the summer breeze on my face, the autumn liminality and coziness, the holiday solitude (especially the holiday solitude - those crossed out lines, ugh!!), extravagant expression of the spring and the grounding reality - all together! With a list of items on a grocery list!!! See I wasn't kidding when I said I'd read your grocery list!

  • Poppy 7 months ago

    I love this! The photo as well, idk how you always choose such good photos that go with your pieces. And titles! They’re always good and unique and I’m jealous! The crossed out words were so so effective and the ‘1 friend’ completely broke my heart.

  • Hannah Moore7 months ago

    Very sad.

  • Paul Stewart7 months ago

    hmmmm very interesting

  • Test7 months ago

    Everyone loves to get expensive gifts, even if they don't really need them.

  • Arslan7 months ago

    🥰

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