Down!
Love you! Mean it! (Her Response to, “Up!”)
Down, down, down boy, down,
lest I slap you to the sand.
Let me be, to nap in my gown.
Paw me man, I will snap your hand.
💤
REM trip gone, it’s out of my head.
Obey me now or fail my test.
Sip some Java, find a tale to read,
Take an hour or two, dear, I don’t jest.
💤
Get out, get out, get out of our bed.
I love you, mean it. But try me and see.
If you kiss me, I vow you are dead.
Veil the sun and let me be.
💤
Down, down, love boy, Stop!
Lest I stab you and call the cops.
💤💤💤 💤💤💤 💤💤💤
Note - This is a woman’s response to my poem “Up” written about a couple in early first light of morning from the man’s perspective. Credit goes to Dharrsheena for her comments on “Up.”😂
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J. S. Wade
Since reading Tolkien in Middle school, I have been fascinated with creating, reading, and hearing art through story’s and music. I am a perpetual student of writing and life.
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Comments (12)
Delightful & quite realistic response!
Hahahahahahahahahhaah I freaking loved this so much! Sleep is the most important thing to me! Anyone who comes in between me and my sleep will pay! 🤣🤣🤣🤣
Hahaha. That is great!
So Creative! This was Awesome sauce on my day!!! BRAVO Scott!😊
That was interesting!
I love that you did this as a response to Up! Such a clever idea! “But try me and see” got me, I can’t tell you how many times a day that’s been said to my poor husband! Makes this poem so much more relatable for me! Amazing work J.S!
Outstanding and left a heart ♥
Good one Scott!!! You always come up with the best!!!
Well Done❤️😉💯
A great response. Well done, and thanks, Dharrseena for inspiring it!
That lead image, tho. I really like the way you made collaboration and inspiration work together.
🤣🤣🤣. This was hilarious and relatable LOL