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Don't Let me Fall

I'm slipping away...

By HandsomelouiiThePoet (Lonzo ward)Published 3 months ago β€’ Updated about a month ago β€’ 1 min read
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Laying low in the shadows...

I staggered while trying to walk through the Darkness...

My Anxiety turned into fear, And I Became someone else...

I'm hoping for you...

While reaching out to another...

Anyone who can Give me Desires...

I want to Love but can I be Loved?

I hungered, for so long, and I had forgotten what it was...

When I'm at my lowest,

Will you at least pick me up?

When I have no Balance...

Will you at least be my crutch?

Don't let me fall...

Please just hold onto me...

I'm slipping away...

Don't let me fall...

I ran around in circles

Inside a world unknown...

How could my once ago Soft heart, Turn into stone...

Don't let me go!

Can you keep me humble,

When My mind is filled with Drama?

I'm on the edge of surfing,

But I don't know about swimming...

All I know is that I Like the Colors of the water...

But what happens when I Fall over...

Will you catch me before I Fall under...

Can you Dive deep?

Will you rescue me?

From my Risky curiosity...

Don't let me Fall...

Please just hold onto me...

I'm slipping away...

Don't let me fall...

I know you'll keep me safe...

Precisely when I thought I was falling into The Deep...

You put me on the float!

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  • Em Starrrrr13 days ago

    Just beautiful.

  • Another beautiful one

  • Drew Smith14 days ago

    This was inspiring. Beautiful!

  • Donna Fox16 days ago

    This was beautiful, heartfelt and engaging! I applaud your bravery to be so vulnerable in this piece!

  • Caroline Craven17 days ago

    Beautiful and vulnerable.

  • Felt it, loved it.

  • Daniel Jeyaraman17 days ago

    This definitely feels close to heart, great poem, Lonzo.

  • Quincy.v18 days ago

    The poem beautifully captures the feelings of fear and vulnerability, while highlighting the importance of having someone to lean on during difficult times.

  • I absolutely loved the part about surfing and not diving in. Lord knows I've done plenty of that, looking at something I want so much to do, and for whatever reason am so afraid that I don't deserve it... that I never jump. GREAT poem! ;)

  • I can feel the emotion in your words. Nicely done my friend.

  • Ravishankar V K23 days ago

    Beautifully written πŸ‘

  • Donna Renee26 days ago

    Wow, this was deeeep and beautifully written! I could feel it!

  • The Invisible Writerabout a month ago

    This was so wonderful. You really brought the emotion to life.

  • Lamar Wiggins2 months ago

    Wow! I felt I was falling too. I wanted to just reach out and grab you but realized I wasn't there. I'm satisfied with the ending. Great job!

  • Lisa A Lachapelle2 months ago

    Subtle angst, great for poetry, nice!

  • Pam Reeder2 months ago

    Fantastic. Beautifully written.

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  • Mariann Carroll2 months ago

    Hearted , your poems have such used of words that you grab the reader in . Congrats 🎊

  • KJ Aartila2 months ago

    Extraordinary and heart-felt - I love the vulnerability you used - Congrats on your Top Story!

  • Burn Book2 months ago

    Great piece!

  • PP2 months ago

    Nice one Hey, I just published a love poem, can read it and give me some feedback.

  • Everyday Junglist2 months ago

    Never has there been a man who has not fallen..or has there been? https://vocal.media/fiction/the-man-who-never-fell

  • Congratulations on your Top Story!!! I already said this is my favorite poem of your thus far. And now so many more people get to enjoy this sentimental piece!

  • Melissa Ingoldsby2 months ago

    Congratulations on the top story!!!

  • I feel like I can hear your voice very well through your writing. I felt a lot of emotions reading your Poem. πŸ–₯πŸ’—

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