Depth and breadth and height
"I love thee with the breath, smiles, tears of all my life!" - Elizabeth Barrett Browning
First Date
Under the table
at lunch our hands touched -- one spark
set the woods on fire
...
First Anniversary
Even in embrace
sometimes the space between us
makes it hard to breathe
...
First Child
Delta: two bodies
of water pour into one ...
Also, rate of change
...
Last Breath
Under gnawing earth,
we will reach beyond our graves
to clasp bony hands
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About the Creator
Sonia Heidi Unruh
I love: my husband and children; all who claim me as family or friend; the first bite of chocolate; the last blue before sunset; solving puzzles; stroking cats; finding myself by writing; losing myself in reading; the Creator who is love.
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A love life’s journey in four poems: and in haiku form! What a feat. So much is said in the negative space between each carefully chosen word, which act like seeds and catalysts for the reader to fill in the rest. Like the DNA helix ot a love story. I like the cyclical connection between the first and the last haiku, using touch as a link. I can feel the fire in the first and lost my breath in the second. The image if the delta and the two rivers in conjunction to create an entire ocean has so much hidden beneath those words. Made me think of all the work parents put into raising a child, like the trickle of two rivers trying to fill an ocean. Rate of change! What a great way to put it (will leave what i think it means for other readers to interpret) and the biting image of the gnawing earth, conjuring worms and the whole process in a few words. Bravo. I hope a set of haikus like this represents my life with my beloved. 🥰
Well said....!!!
You are the Samurai of Haiku yumminess!
I really enjoyed the first one. Great poem!
This is incredibly beautiful. Well done.
Fantastic ❤️