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Buzz of Love

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By Teresa RentonPublished 10 months ago 1 min read
Runner-Up in the Short and Sweet Challenge
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A sun’s waxy heat rays

draw a line down each long limb,

gild our wet

skin on skin,

slow time,

melt shy coy

from a new

me and you.

*

This fire hot sun

pins us to dewy turf,

we fuse and set

like art

in a cast iron kiln.

A bug sits near,

calm

with no care

for your want

of my body

and my need

for you.

*

Soon the sun sets

on a slow sigh

from our lips

and the bug hums

in sync to our buzz

of lust, of love,

of what we know

will be our tale to tell,

or not,

of our past,

our now,

our for ever.

* * *

love poems
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About the Creator

Teresa Renton

Inhaling life, exhaling stories, poetry, prose, flash or fusions. An imperfect perfectionist who writes and recycles words. I write because I love how it feels to make ink patterns & form words, like pictures, on a page.

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  • Jazzy 7 months ago

    This was so beautiful! Congrats on Runner up!

  • Mackenzie Davis9 months ago

    Back to congratulate you! So well done! ❤️

  • Wow that one is truly incredible! Some really evocative language, brings the poem to life! Excellent job, I see why it placed in the contest. Congrats on that by the way!

  • Dana Crandell9 months ago

    Congratulations, Teresa! Glad to see this one made it!

  • Marilyn Glover9 months ago

    "Like art in a cast iron kiln" -my favorite line. Congratulations, Teresa! 🏆

  • Babs Iverson9 months ago

    Sweet!!!

  • C. H. Richard9 months ago

    Beautiful ♥️ Loved this line especially "we fuse and set like art in a cast iron kiln" . Just stunning♥️

  • Oh this was so good. Melt shy coy I love that line

  • Gosh I love how this blended the beauty of love and nature together! You painted such a beautiful picture with your poem!

  • J. S. Wade10 months ago

    Sensuous, fluid, in sync love and in touch. with nature. Beautiful poem. 🥰

  • Dana Crandell10 months ago

    This is gorgeous, Teresa! Beautiful imagery and it flows like water!

  • Caroline Jane10 months ago

    Oh that bug! What a wonderful frame for the sentiment. Well.done. ❤

  • Mackenzie Davis10 months ago

    A gorgeous vignette. Utterly captivating, and the visual of the sun shining into the room and the bug correlated to carnal need -- beautiful writing. 💖

  • Cendrine Marrouat10 months ago

    Snap, snap, snap!

  • So well done 👏

  • Tiffany Gordon 10 months ago

    gorgeous work!!!!

  • Cathy holmes10 months ago

    Wow. Thus is just beautiful. Well done.

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