Fall is ours.
Or, is it fall at dawn
late heat and us
in a lush red leaf?
I think of you here
red rocks on a lawn
in mid day pools of sun.
I lean on your arm
walk at your side
a cold hand in warm
and feel you grin
with soft fawn eyes
that see the blue jay
in a tree of gold dust.
I knew that well-hid
one back home,
her chip-chip a near
loss upon the wind.
But she was real, once.
We are a song in your car
hot seat and bare leg
deep in new talk
and a ride home.
This is the zeal
that will come
in the moon pass,
one and two, then you,
a soft wisp, said
in the cusp of a doze
upon your bed.
“I love you.”
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Mackenzie Davis
“When you are describing a shape, or sound, or tint, don’t state the matter plainly, but put it in a hint. And learn to look at all things with a sort of mental squint.” Lewis Carroll
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A truly dreamy and magical experience. I love in particular the two lines leading up to the end: "a soft wisp, said in the cusp of a doze" Congratulations on a well-merited Top Story!
That's why I love poems. Can't get enough. Nice read.
loved it!
Beautiful
Loved this and the end with "a cusp of a doze upon your bed". Really lovely 💙 Anneliese
Mackenzie, I love the descriptive language that created a vivid image in this poem. It was beautiful and so well worded, love the sentimental feel this had. Great work! Congratulations on Top Story!! 🎉
Congratulations
Quite lovely and congratulations 🤍
This is just stunningly beautiful and incredibly talented. Definitely deserves to win the challenge!
I loved every detail in this piece. Congratulations 🎉🎊
Very good
I really don't think I could improve on what everyone else has said. This is just beautiful. Just oh my...oh my oh my!
Stole the show with the opening line! <3
Opening four lines are magic. Lovely stuff Mackenzie.
A truly outstanding poem, Mackenzie! Congratulations!
Awesome ✨ Congratulations on your Top Story😉💯🎉
Congrats on the TS.
Just gorgeous. Congrats on the TS.
Congratulations on Top Story, Mackenzie! 😍 I love this one so much 🤗
Congratulations on your Top story , great poem
felt so lovely to read out loud!
Felt every word of this absolutely beautiful love story! Really wonderful imagery! Congrats on top story, Mackenzie!
Awww, this was so lovely and wonderful! Romantic! You did such an awesome job on this!
That ending felt like a soft bed I want to come back to after a long day at work, this was STUNNING (all caps)
I really adore this, Mackenzie! So many truly gorgeous phrases here and a charming love story throughout 🥹❤️ Just beautiful!