A Day Off Work (or The Boy on the Bike)
A poem about a day which was shrouded in shame and yet, turned out to be something totally different
A day off suggests play;
A day out, away, to somewhere else:
Treats on new streets; panoramic vistas; good friends.
Lunch on a patio, pretty cakes on platters; sunsets.
I was at a golf club
In the leafy depths of England's countryside.
Greens and green fields, littered by trees.
Home of buggies, trollies and
Mid-morning pints, the scattered loud laughter
Of the gleeful retired.
Freckly legs, hairy and white-bordered with ankle socks,
Strapped by sandals.
Masculine checked upholstery, designed for purpose.
"Marjorie, do you want a ginger ale?"
The chink of club hitting a dimpled ball;
Sun hitting grass, expanding a fair way.
I don't play golf. I don't like golf.
It was a day thrust upon me
By myself, of my own making
But not of my own choosing.
Not a treat
But mistreatment of another
Brought me here.
One dark winter's night, slippery, wet, gloomy:
My boy's basketball practice and we were late -
I forced a boy from his motorbike
In a move hasty and ill-conceived,
Rushed and regrettable.
Not a close shave.
Bruised, shocked, shaken but not broken - he was alright
But I felt the shame like a slap!
I made a mistake.
My boy was witness to my lack of care.
I was lucky. I believe that. So was he, the boy on the bike.
Minor injuries only, no ambulance needed.
A lesson delivered by Death, his closeness to me
To us that night, in His hood
With his macabre grinning face
Rubbing his skeletal finger on His blade
Preparing for the grim reaping,
Raised and trembling
His scythe skimming my face,
And those of others
Like an unwanted caress.
I quaked with it, to my core.
The aftermath was tense: Consequences Pending.
- What will be my fate?
Branded dangerous, inconsiderate, unsafe?
Banned?
All were judgements suggested.
And then a letter arrives:
You must attend a course at a golf course.
Months later, the day off comes.
Booked.
Strange venue for a chastening;
Pastoral with pensioners pursuing
Their languid leisure time.
I am conscious of the incongruity:
Peaceful punishment for careless car crash.
We were five penitents,
One no show.
Sam was late, traffic to blame.
Dark room, sun blocked out.
A white screen of scenarios and
Bullet points.
We were made to confess
By our assessor/confessor:
"Why are you here?"
He was sombre, befitting the mood.
Dominant in his authoritarian stature;
Physically present and experience oozing.
I felt embarrassed being there
Like a naughty child kept behind at school:
A detention enforced for bad behaviour,
A learned lesson needed.
But I was relieved by the discussion:
A cleansing of sorts.
I was not alone that day.
There was comfort in the confession;
Sharing the shame.
Soon, the lecture was over.
The mood palpable in its lightening
As tension leaves with its chaperone of nerves accompanying.
And then, the drive.
Awareness assessment
One-on-one.
Who likes to be tested? By strangers?
Not me, not like this.
We get in the car, focus ready,
Awareness augmented.
Alert.
A sunny day and strange roads
Nothing familiar, nothing certain
Except my trepidation
And the solid presence of the man
Next to me.
How would I perform? Am I safe and considerate?
It was fine - strange but fine.
A drive in the country, wind in my hair,
Roof down, sun blazing
Like Thelma and Louise
In some odd comedic parody.
Less glamorous, less frenzied.
Breezing down lanes, past golden cottages
Of thatch and small lead windows and thick oak doors,
Through dappled lanes where trees cause shadows,
Past neon cyclists struggling on hills,
Slow and unsteady, not winning the race.
I was vigilant. Taut:
Watching. Observing.
The road. The signs. The people.
Learning to be better.
I had a good day.
It was joyful, a surprise!
A reckoning, yes, of seriousness and reflection,
But a ride too; like a tourist
On a Regency trip,
We bounded forwards on tarmac,
Free but within boundaries.
This was unexpected, for sure.
Where was the reprimand?
I drove well, I know.
I was present and measured.
I passed and my slate is clean.
Blackened without mark and unblackened by past mistakes.
Wiped.
But not from memory.
It comes full circle.
I drove to basketball tonight in the same car,
On the same route but at a considered pace.
And now, I sit and write.
The sun sets, creating amplified half-light;
Dusky, sultry, the day fading out:
My day off work.
I am sat, looking at shorn fields which roll and ruck
Split by trees, grouped and singular,
Gathered in gossipy clumps or
Like soldiers, rigid.
Birds flit and birds streak, singing and swooping
Hopping before me, beaks full, beadily eyeing me.
The colours of summer crops
And fecundity before me:
Gold, lime and deep, deep green.
The peak of June.
The squeak of court shoes
And the dull thud of the basketball
Bouncing
Punctuates my writing atmosphere.
The wind catches my paper
And blows hair on my lips.
It tickles and I smile.
I slurp on strawberries;
Pink, succulent, sweet.
Juice drops on my paper from
The snacks of Summer.
It is the end of my day off.
I am reflecting on the dreaded day
Where I had to face my recklessness
And redeem myself in the eyes of the law.
I have enjoyed it. Bizarrely.
I learnt, I confronted, I responded.
I am beyond the event into cathartic territory.
It is over.
But most of all
I feel lucky, looking at the view
Writing, composing
Basking in the encroaching twilight
And I am at peace
With myself.
Because I am sorry.
And because I get to live.
And so does the boy on the bike.
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Comments (13)
I'm very glad everyone was ok! I hopped over to read this one after reading "Written off" - that sounded very scary!
I must also look up “fecundity”.. I have not idea what that means. 😊
Nicely penned and very sobering to read.
Great story! Loved it! Thank you!
Thank you for sharing and so glad it was a good outcome
That was such a powerful poem, Rachel! Glad no one was seriously injured or worse!
Wow. That's quite an emotional story. Glad everyone is okay.
Wow!!! That was quite a ride!!!Loved it!!!❤️❤️💕
What a roller coaster of emotions that went into this penning on the prose. So happy everyone ended up ok.
-Like Thelma and Louise ❤️😉
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Omgggg! This was so scary! I'm so glad you and the boy are okay. And that everything went well after that.
Well done! It sounds like you had quite the experience! Wonderfully penned - I felt all the emotions as you were describing them so beautifully and the different elements like the scenery and surroundings, put me right in your shoes! Great stuff, Rachel!